Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise: remove filler words (uh), correct grammar (use plural/singular and tense), and give one clear reason plus a brief example. Keep answers within 2–4 sentences and use linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures because they help me remember special places when I return to my country. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the beach so I can recall the colours and atmosphere later.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, remove hesitation, and use correct grammar and linking words (because/so). Give a specific reason and a short example or contrast.

예시: I prefer rural views because nature is calmer and more picturesque than cityscapes. For instance, I like photographing green fields and mountains rather than crowded streets and industrial buildings.

제안: State your preference clearly, avoid repetition and fillers, and support your opinion with a specific reason and brief example. Use varied vocabulary (landscapes, scenery, urban) and linking words (because, for example).

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer more diverse natural scenery than my hometown. For example, I enjoyed hiking and photographing coastal cliffs when I visited another country, which I can't easily find at home.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures because I like to, uh, remember them if, if I went, uh, back to my country.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures because I like to remember them if I go back to my country.

The clause refers to a possible future or habitual action, so use simple present for the conditional 'if' clause (first conditional or general conditional), not past tense 'went'. Use 'go' to match the meaning. Also remove filler sounds and extra commas for clarity.

× So I think taking picture is the most, uh, the most, uh, beautiful moment.

✓ So I think taking pictures is the most beautiful moment.

'Taking pictures' is plural and needs 'pictures' not 'picture'. The structure 'taking pictures is' is correct because the gerund phrase is singular; keep 'is'. Remove repeated filler phrases and extra commas to make the sentence natural.

× Uh, I prefer views in rural areas because I think it's there, uh, maybe be a natural views that can be more beautiful than urban areas because it's all about shopping and factories.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I think there may be natural views that are more beautiful than urban areas, which are mostly about shopping and factories.

Original has incorrect pronoun and modal placement ('it's there maybe be'), incorrect article/number agreement ('a natural views'), and unclear relative clause. Use 'there may be' for possibility, 'natural views' plurally, and 'that are more beautiful' to agree with 'views'. Clarify contrast by using 'which are mostly about...'. Remove filler words.

× I do prefer views in other countries because my country doesn't have a lot of, uh, views.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because my country doesn't have many scenic views.

Use 'many' with countable plural 'views' rather than 'a lot of' in this context for conciseness; 'scenic views' is a clearer phrase. Remove redundant 'I do prefer' to sound natural.

× It's all about city, you know, it's shopping and all about streets.

✓ It's mostly a city environment, you know, with shopping and lots of streets.

Use 'a city environment' or 'mostly a city' for clarity. 'It's shopping and all about streets' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'with shopping and lots of streets' to convey meaning.