Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Сократите паузы и слова-паразиты, дайте более связный и ёмкий ответ. Начните с чётного тематического предложения, затем приведите 1–2 конкретных примера и объяснение, используя связки (for example, because). Следите за грамматикой (например, не говорить «nature's»).

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I especially like capturing nature, such as forests and flowers, because they show vivid colors and delicate details. For example, I often photograph blossoms in the morning light to capture their texture.

제안: Исправьте грамматические ошибки и стройте предложение ясно: выразите предпочтение в одной фразе, затем поясните причину с использованием связок (because, although, while). Избегайте повторов («I I», «we was»).

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the variety of architecture and bustling streets. While rural landscapes are peaceful, cities offer interesting contrasts like modern buildings and historic streets that inspire my photography.

제안: Сформулируйте чёткое мнение и объясните его с конкретикой. Используйте связки (however, although, because) для сравнения. Поправьте согласование (plural/singular) и избегайте помех в речи.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and meaningful to me. However, I also find foreign landscapes fascinating because they often feature different cultures and unusual scenery that I rarely see at home.

× I like taking pictures of different views. Especially I like, uh, taking pictures of, uh, nature's and the flowers. I also like taking pictures of, umm, of.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views. Especially, I like taking pictures of nature and flowers. I also like taking pictures of landscapes.

The original uses 'nature's' which incorrectly uses a possessive form; 'nature' should be a noun without an apostrophe. Redundant fillers and repeated 'of' are present. Suggest using 'landscapes' or 'nature and flowers' for clarity. Remove unnecessary 'of' and filler words. Use the present participle 'taking' correctly with 'like'.

× I I prefer we was in urban areas were interesting and I like it.

✓ I prefer urban areas because they are interesting, and I like them.

The sentence contains subject-verb agreement errors: 'we was' is incorrect (should be 'we were') but here the intended subject is 'urban areas' so use 'they are'. Also 'were interesting' mismatches singular/plural and tense. Simplify to 'urban areas are interesting' and use 'them' to refer to 'urban areas'. Remove duplicate 'I' and fillers.

× Uh, for me urban is very beautiful than rural.

✓ For me, urban areas are much more beautiful than rural areas.

The original omits the comparative structure 'more' before 'beautiful'. 'Very beautiful than' is incorrect. Use 'more beautiful than' or 'much more beautiful than'. Also include plural 'areas' for consistency.

× I prefer views in my own country because I like country, but uh, views of, uh, other countries is more interesting.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I like my country, but views of other countries are more interesting.

Plural subject 'views' requires plural verb 'are', not 'is'. Also 'I like country' is missing the article/pronoun; use 'my country'. Remove fillers and extra commas for clarity.