Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời cần tự nhiên hơn, giảm tiếng um/ah và sửa ngữ pháp. Nên mở đầu trực tiếp, dùng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng và tối đa 3 câu phụ để mô tả thói quen và lý do. Dùng từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ: "digital camera" thay vì "digital umbrella camera") và đưa chi tiết cụ thể về loại ảnh bạn thích chụp hoặc hoàn cảnh khi chụp.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially when I travel abroad. I usually carry a small digital camera to capture landscapes and local scenes. For example, I like photographing sunsets over the ocean or traditional markets because they show the culture.

제안: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều tiếng ngắt quãng cùng lỗi logic. Nên trả lời trực tiếp (I prefer rural views), nêu lý do cụ thể và thêm một ví dụ. Sử dụng liên từ như "because" hoặc "so" hợp lý, tránh lặp từ và thông tin không liên quan.

예시: I prefer rural views because they feel peaceful and more natural compared to the city. For instance, I enjoy photographing rice fields and small villages where I can capture wide-open spaces and quiet life. These scenes are more relaxing and visually interesting to me.

제안: Câu trả lời đúng hướng nhưng cần ngữ pháp chuẩn và cấu trúc mạch lạc hơn. Trả lời trực tiếp (I prefer views in my own country), nêu 1-2 lý do cụ thể và kết thúc bằng một ví dụ hoặc gợi ý ngắn. Tránh lặp từ và sửa lỗi như thiếu mạo từ và thì động từ.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Vietnam has diverse and beautiful landscapes, from mountains to beaches. For example, I would recommend visiting Ha Long Bay for its dramatic limestone islands and Sapa for terraced rice fields, which are both stunning photo subjects.

× Uh, yes, I would like taking picture of different view, especially when I come to another country.

✓ Uh, yes, I would like to take pictures of different views, especially when I travel to another country.

The verb 'would like' should be followed by the infinitive 'to take' rather than the -ing form; also 'picture' and 'view' need plural forms to match general activity and 'come to another country' is better expressed as 'travel to another country' for naturalness.

× I usually bring my digital umbrella camera to uh, in order to take a picture of uh, different scenery and beautiful something I see.

✓ I usually bring my digital camera in order to take pictures of different scenery and beautiful things I see.

Remove the unnecessary word 'umbrella' unless intended; 'a picture of different scenery' is awkward—use plural 'pictures' and 'beautiful things' to refer generally; 'in order to' is fine but 'to uh, in order to' had extra preposition 'to' which should be removed.

× Oh, I like, uh, view in rural area than urban area because I live in the city.

✓ Oh, I prefer views in rural areas to those in urban areas because I live in the city.

Use 'prefer A to B' structure; 'view' should be plural 'views', 'rural area' and 'urban area' should be plural or use 'the'/'a' appropriately; compare 'views in rural areas to those in urban areas' for clarity.

× So I think, uh, although uh, everything is very modern, uh, bus, uh, they have two people in order to enjoy the view.

✓ So I think that although everything in the city is very modern, people still use buses so they can enjoy the view.

Original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Reorganize with a main clause 'I think that' and a subordinate clause 'although everything in the city is very modern'; clarify subject 'people' and purpose 'so they can enjoy the view' rather than 'they have two people'.

× Oh, uh, certainly I prefer view in my country to other country, uh, because, uh, in Vietnam have many scenery to enjoy.

✓ Oh, certainly I prefer views in my country to those in other countries because Vietnam has many scenic places to enjoy.

Use plural 'views' and compare 'in my country to those in other countries'; 'in Vietnam have many scenery' is ungrammatical—use subject 'Vietnam has' and 'scenic places' or 'scenery' without 'many' or 'many scenic places'.

× So if the, the visitor come here, I suggest, uh, them come to around Vietnam because it's very beautiful.

✓ So if visitors come here, I suggest they travel around Vietnam because it is very beautiful.

Remove duplicated 'the', use plural 'visitors' for general statement, change verb 'come' to 'come' with subject-verb agreement 'visitors come'; use 'I suggest they travel' rather than 'I suggest them come to around Vietnam'; 'around Vietnam' is better than 'to around Vietnam'.