Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장 구조와 어휘 선택은 대체로 괜찮지만 발음 오류(예: "residue" 대신 "residence")와 불필요한 반복("taking it around and taking pictures")이 있습니다. 답변은 주제문을 명확히 한 뒤 구체적 세부사항을 하나나 두 개로 정리해 간결하게 말하세요. 연결어와 더 정확한 단어를 사용해 자연스럽게 이어지는 문장을 만들면 점수가 오릅니다. 예: 카메라 종류 언급 후 촬영하는 장면이나 이유를 한두 문장으로 구체화하세요.

예시: Yes, I do. I have a small Canon digital camera, and I often take it with me to photograph cityscapes near my home. For example, I enjoy capturing evening street scenes when the lights turn on because the contrast between shadows and neon signs creates interesting compositions.

제안: 답변은 명확한 주제문과 개인적 이유를 포함해 비교적 잘 구성되어 있습니다. 다만 비격식적 표현(예: 'cause', 'uh')과 모호한 표현('complicated city')은 피하세요. 연결어를 사용해 이유와 빈도(얼마나 자주 가는지) 또는 구체적 활동을 덧붙이면 더 설득력 있습니다.

예시: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because I live in Seoul, which is very busy and crowded. Since I rarely visit the countryside, I really appreciate the peace and open space there, and I especially enjoy walking along quiet trails and photographing wide landscapes.

제안: 아이디어는 괜찮지만 문법 및 표현 오류(예: 'Scenario is in my country', 'I've been living with it like 20 years')가 있어 의미 전달이 흐려집니다. 문장을 간결하게 고쳐 자연스럽게 비교하세요. 이유를 좀 더 구체적으로 제시하고 연결어(However, because, therefore 등)를 사용하면 문맥이 명확해집니다.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they feel more exotic and unfamiliar. At home, the scenery is comfortable and relaxing, but after living there for about twenty years, I find foreign landscapes more exciting and inspiring when I travel.

× I own a camera, a small digital camera from Canon and I like taking it around and taking pictures of the city views around my residue.

✓ I own a camera, a small digital Canon camera, and I like taking it around and taking pictures of the city views around my residence.

The preposition 'from' is awkward when describing a brand; use adjective order 'digital Canon camera'. 'Around my residue' is incorrect word choice; 'residence' (거주지) is the correct noun. Also add commas for clarity. Use proper word choice rather than a preposition error. Suggestion: Say 'digital Canon camera' or 'a small Canon digital camera' and use 'residence' for where you live.

× I believe I prefer rural areas to urban areas 'cause I live in a complicated city, uh, the capital city of South Korea.

✓ I believe I prefer rural areas to urban areas because I live in a crowded city, the capital of South Korea.

The casual contraction ''cause' should be 'because' in formal speech. 'Complicated city' is not a natural collocation; 'crowded' or 'busy' better expresses meaning. 'Capital city of South Korea' can be shortened to 'the capital of South Korea.' These are word choice and preposition/phrase corrections. Suggestion: Use 'because' and choose natural adjectives like 'crowded' or 'busy'.

× I get less chance to visit rural areas.

✓ I get fewer chances to visit rural areas.

Countable nouns like 'chance' require 'fewer' rather than 'less.' Also plural 'chances' is more natural. This is a quantifier/tense-related usage correction. Suggestion: Use 'fewer chances' when referring to countable opportunities.

× So when I have a chance to visit those places, I very much enjoy it.

✓ So when I have a chance to visit those places, I enjoy it very much.

Adverb placement: 'very much' should come after the object or the verb phrase in this structure. 'Enjoy it very much' is the natural word order in English. This fixes sentence structure and adverb placement. Suggestion: Place 'very much' after the verb phrase.

× I like the exotic views of other countries.

✓ I like the exotic views of other countries.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Keep as is if you mean you enjoy unfamiliar or 'exotic' scenery abroad. Suggestion: None.

× Scenario is in my country could be very comfortable and relaxing.

✓ The scenery in my country can be very comfortable and relaxing.

'Scenario' is the wrong word; 'scenery' refers to views. The sentence needs a subject and modal verb: 'The scenery in my country can be...' or 'The scenery in my country is often very...'. This corrects word choice and sentence structure. Suggestion: Use 'scenery' and a modal/verb like 'can be' or 'is'.

× But those views I've been living with it like 20 years so if I have a chance I do prefer views in other countries.

✓ But I've been living with those views for about 20 years, so if I have a chance I prefer the views in other countries.

Pronoun and tense issues: 'those views I've been living with it' has an extraneous 'it' and awkward word order. Use 'I've been living with those views for about 20 years' and 'prefer' (simple present) fits habitual preference. Also add punctuation for clarity. 'Like 20 years' should be 'for about 20 years.' Suggestion: Remove unnecessary pronouns, use 'for' with time periods, and keep verb tense consistent for habitual preferences.