Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two precise reasons or examples. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um) and repetition. Use singular/plural correctly and correct collocations (e.g., "capture small moments" not "every little movements"). Aim for 2–4 sentences and use a linking phrase when adding detail.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy photographing different views. I especially like capturing small moments in nature, such as cloud formations, because they change quickly and create dramatic lighting. For example, last week I photographed layered clouds at sunset which gave my photo vivid colors and strong contrast.

제안: Answer directly with a clear preference or say you like both, then support it with specific contrasting details using linking words (e.g., "On the one hand..., on the other hand..."). Reduce filler and correct grammar ("Both have" not "Both has"). Keep to 2–4 sentences and provide concrete examples of what you like about each setting.

예시: I like both urban and rural views for different reasons. On the one hand, urban areas have impressive architecture and vibrant street scenes, such as glass skyscrapers and busy markets. On the other hand, rural areas offer peaceful landscapes and open fields, like green hills and quiet lakes, which are great for nature photography.

제안: Give a clearer, more coherent answer with a topic sentence stating your preference, then provide specific reasons and a brief example. Avoid vague or confusing phrases like "chaotic views." If you mean lively or unique scenery, say so. Keep it concise and error-free.

예시: I prefer the views in my own country because they feel more familiar and lively to me. For example, local streets full of markets, festivals, and colorful buildings create a unique atmosphere I haven't found elsewhere. However, I also enjoy visiting other countries to see different architectures and natural landscapes.

× I think I, I'm a person who likes to capture every little movements, every little things, every beautiful things.

✓ I think I
m a person who likes to capture every little movement, every little thing, every beautiful thing.

The noun phrases use plural forms after 'every', which requires singular nouns. Use 'movement', 'thing', 'thing' instead of 'movements', 'things'. Also remove the extra comma and contraction spacing: 'I
m'. Suggestion: after 'every' always use a singular noun (every + singular noun).

× Uh, the thing that I most, uh, love taking photos are the clouds.

✓ Uh, the thing that I most love taking photos of is the clouds.

The subject 'the thing that I most love taking photos of' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. Also the verb phrase requires 'of' at the end: 'taking photos of'. Suggestion: ensure the verb agrees with the true subject and include necessary prepositions.

× I don't think we can compare the views between the urban and the rural areas.

✓ I don't think we can compare the views of urban and rural areas.

Using 'the urban and the rural areas' is awkward and causes article mismatch; 'views of urban and rural areas' is more natural. No subject-verb error in original but it's an article/structure issue tied to agreement; classified as subject-verb agreement category per list. Suggestion: use 'views of urban and rural areas' for clarity.

× Both has beautiful, stunning views.

✓ Both have beautiful, stunning views.

The pronoun 'both' is plural and requires the plural verb 'have', not 'has'. Suggestion: remember that 'both' takes plural verbs.

× It all depends on the perspective or uh, the thing that you want to see, like in, uh, urban views, UC, big, big cities, beautiful, big, big buildings and in uh, rural.

✓ It all depends on the perspective or the thing you want to see: in urban areas you might see big, beautiful buildings, and in rural areas you might see fields and countryside.

Original sentence is fragmented and repetitive, with unclear reference 'UC' and an incomplete clause 'in uh, rural.' Fix by completing the parallel structure and choosing clear nouns. Suggestion: use parallel comparisons ('in urban areas... and in rural areas...') and avoid filler words.

× I will be a little biased and I would say that I prefer views in my own country because you cannot get any more chaotic views than my country.

✓ I
m a little biased, and I would say that I prefer views in my own country because you cannot find more chaotic views than in my country.

Mixing 'I will be' and 'I would say' is awkward; use 'I
m' or 'I will be' consistently. Also use 'find' rather than 'get', and include 'in' before 'my country' in the comparison. Suggestion: keep modal consistency and include preposition in comparisons.

× Anywhere in the world there are a there is a chaos that comes your mind.

✓ Anywhere in the world, there is a kind of chaos that comes to mind.

The phrase 'a there is a chaos' is ungrammatical and 'chaos' is an uncountable noun, so it should not take 'a'. Also 'comes your mind' should be 'comes to mind'. Suggestion: remove the extra article and use 'comes to mind' and 'a kind of chaos' if a countable sense is needed.