Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện phát âm và ngữ pháp cơ bản, tránh lỗi cấu trúc (ví dụ: “is make me” không đúng) và loại bỏ tiếng tạp ‘uh’. Trả lời trực tiếp bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể (khi nào, với ai, cảm xúc). Giữ độ dài không quá 5 câu và dùng từ vựng phù hợp như “memories”, “scenery”, “relaxing”.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me preserve memories of places I visit. I often photograph landscapes when I go on picnics with my friends, and looking back at the photos makes me feel relaxed and happy.

제안: Cải thiện tính mạch lạc bằng cách nối các ý với liên từ hợp lý và tránh tiếng ngập ngừng như “MMM”. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn (ví dụ địa điểm, hoạt động cụ thể) để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn. Dùng từ vựng miêu tả phù hợp như “tranquil”, “picturesque”.

예시: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more relaxing, with wide green fields and trees. For example, on weekends I often go to a nearby village to walk and take photos of the rolling hills, although I also enjoy city scenes when I meet friends in cafés.

제안: Sửa ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (“my our country”, “not grounded”). Loại bỏ tiếng ngập ngừng và phát triển câu chủ đề bằng một lý do cụ thể rồi nêu ví dụ rõ ràng (địa danh, hoạt động). Thay “not grounded” bằng từ chính xác như “crowded” hoặc “disturbed”.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because they are familiar and remind me of home, which helps me relax. For instance, I often visit the mountains near my city on weekends to enjoy the peaceful scenery and take walks away from busy crowds.

× Yes, I prefer taking pictures of different view because I find interesting activity to save place that I visited.

✓ Yes, I prefer taking pictures of different views because I find it an interesting activity to save the places that I visited.

The noun 'view' should be plural 'views' to match 'different'. 'Activity' needs an article 'an' and 'it' as a dummy subject. 'Place' should be plural 'places' because the speaker visited multiple locations. Suggestion: use plural forms when referring to more than one item and include necessary articles and pronouns to complete the sentence. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× Moreover, uh is make me feel very happy and relaxed when I go picnic with my.

✓ Moreover, it makes me feel very happy and relaxed when I go on a picnic with my family.

The sentence lacks a subject; 'is make' is ungrammatical. Use 'it makes' for the general statement. 'Go picnic' requires the expression 'go on a picnic'. The phrase 'with my' is incomplete; likely 'my family' is intended. Suggestion: include a clear subject and use correct verb forms and prepositional phrases. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× MMM I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more relaxing and I like seeing green fields and trees.

✓ I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more relaxing, and I like seeing green fields and trees.

No major grammatical error but remove filler 'MMM' for clarity and add a comma before 'and' for readability. Ensure sentence flows smoothly. Suggestion: avoid fillers and use punctuation to separate clauses. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× For example. I often go to the countryside at weekends to walk and take photos, but sometimes I also enjoy city views when I am meeting friends.

✓ For example, I often go to the countryside on weekends to walk and take photos, but sometimes I also enjoy city views when I meet friends.

Use a comma instead of a period after 'For example'. Use 'on weekends' (common in American English) or 'at weekends' (British); keep consistent. 'When I am meeting friends' is a continuous form that is less natural here; simple present 'when I meet friends' is better for habitual action. Suggestion: keep consistent adverbial phrases and use simple present for habitual actions. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× MMM well I prefer views in my our country because there are familiar and they remind me of home and I feel more relaxed there.

✓ Well, I prefer views in my country because they are familiar and they remind me of home, so I feel more relaxed there.

'My our country' is incorrect; choose 'my country' or 'our country'. 'There are familiar' is ungrammatical: use 'they are familiar'. Add 'so' to connect the reason and result. Suggestion: choose the correct possessive pronoun and ensure subjects agree with verbs. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× For example, I like going to the mountains near my city on weekends because the scenery is peaceful and not grounded.

✓ For example, I like going to the mountains near my city on weekends because the scenery is peaceful and unspoiled.

'Not grounded' is not a natural description for scenery; 'unspoiled' or 'untouched' are appropriate adjectives. Suggestion: use adjectives that correctly describe natural scenery and check dictionary usage when unsure. Grammar problem type ID: 13