Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more natural and concise: give a clear topic sentence, one or two specific examples, and avoid repetition and grammar errors. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “for example” or “and”).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because I love capturing natural light and weather. For example, I often photograph sunrises and rainy scenes because they create dramatic colors and moods. I usually edit a few favorites and upload them to my social media account.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific reasons and contrast with urban areas using linking words (e.g., “because,” “while,” “although”). Correct grammar (plural/singular agreement) and avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they are usually more peaceful and scenic. For example, I enjoy looking at green hills, rivers and open fields, which feel refreshing and calm. While cities have modern buildings and busy streets, I find rural scenery more relaxing and better for taking photos.

제안: Give a concise topic sentence expressing your preference, support it with vivid, specific details, and acknowledge interest in other countries briefly. Use linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “however”) and correct minor grammar issues.

예시: I prefer views in my own country, Nepal, because of its stunning natural landscapes. For example, the mountains, green hills, rivers and peaceful villages offer unique and calming scenery. However, I would still like to visit other countries to see different landscapes and cultures.

× Yes I like taking pictures of different view because I love the view so much like the sun views, the sun said sunrise, rainy.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I love scenes such as sunrises and rainy weather.

The sentence uses singular 'view' where plural 'views' is needed (pluralization). It also contains awkward phrases 'the sun views' and 'the sun said sunrise, rainy.' Replace with correct nouns and parallel structure: 'scenes such as sunrises and rainy weather.' Add a comma after 'Yes' for clarity.

× I like them so much so I like to take a picture and upload in my account social media.

✓ I like them so much, so I like to take pictures and upload them to my social media account.

Use plural 'pictures' to match general preference and use object pronoun 'them' to refer to the pictures. Preposition should be 'to' for uploading to an account, and word order for 'social media account' must be natural. Also add a comma before 'so' connecting clauses.

× I prefer be in rural rural area because they are usually more peaceful and beautiful.

✓ I prefer to be in rural areas because they are usually more peaceful and beautiful.

Infinitive 'to be' is required after 'prefer'. Use plural 'areas' to generalize and remove duplicate 'rural'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun plurality.

× I really like seeing green hills, trees, river and open field.

✓ I really like seeing green hills, trees, rivers, and open fields.

Use plural forms 'rivers' and 'open fields' for a list of typical landscape features. Add Oxford comma for clarity. 'Open field' should be plural to match the other plural items.

× Rural area are also less crowded and less enjoy than cities.

✓ Rural areas are also less crowded and less enjoyable than cities.

Subject and verb: use plural 'areas' with 'are'. 'Less enjoy' is incorrect; use adjective 'enjoyable' to describe the noun. The comparison with 'cities' requires consistent plural forms.

× Although urban area ha have made modern buildings and busy street, I find it rural scenery more relaxing and refreshing.

✓ Although urban areas have built modern buildings and busy streets, I find rural scenery more relaxing and refreshing.

Use plural 'areas' and present perfect 'have built' or present 'have' with past participle; original 'ha have' is duplicated and incorrect. Use plural 'streets'. 'It rural scenery' is ungrammatical; remove 'it' and use 'rural scenery' as the object. Maintain present-tense contrast with 'find'.

× I prefer the view in my own country Nepal, because it has beautiful natural scenery.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country, Nepal, because it has beautiful natural scenery.

Use plural 'views' to match general preference. Add commas around the country name 'Nepal' as an appositive. 'The view in my own country Nepal' sounded specific; plural makes it general and natural.

× There are mountains, green hills, river and peaceful village.

✓ There are mountains, green hills, rivers, and peaceful villages.

Use plural nouns 'rivers' and 'villages' to list multiple landscape features. Maintain parallel structure in the list.

× I especially love the view in the rural areas because they are quiet and relaxing.

✓ I especially love the views in rural areas because they are quiet and relaxing.

Use plural 'views' and remove 'the' before 'rural areas' unless referring to specific areas. 'They' correctly refers to 'rural areas'; sentence otherwise fine.

× Also, I would love to visit other country and see the scenery.

✓ Also, I would love to visit other countries and see their scenery.

Use plural 'countries' when speaking generally and possessive pronoun 'their' to refer back to the countries. Alternatively, 'another country' could be used for a single country. Maintain consistent plurality.

× I think Nepal natural beauty is very special to me.

✓ I think Nepal's natural beauty is very special to me.

Use possessive form 'Nepal's' to link the noun 'natural beauty' to the country. Add apostrophe-s. Also word order 'natural beauty' is correct; possessive required.