Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Bạn trả lời rõ ràng nhưng còn nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, thiếu liên kết và câu kết bị dang dở. Cần rút gọn câu dài, dùng thì đúng (e.g., "take photos"), thêm liên từ để nối ý và phát triển ý cuối cùng với ví dụ cụ thể về lợi ích cho sức khỏe tinh thần/ Thể hiện tối đa 3-4 câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lặp từ.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different scenes, especially when I walk around the city. I often take photos of the Perfume River and the streets near the city centre. Taking photos helps my mental well-being because it makes me more mindful and reduces stress; for example, focusing on details in a scene calms me down.

제안: Câu trả lời có ý rõ ràng nhưng nhiều lỗi từ vựng và cấu trúc ("quarter" incorrect, repeated words, câu không hoàn chỉnh). Cần dùng từ chính xác (quiet), sắp xếp câu hợp lý và bổ sung liên kết để giải thích lý do. Viết 2-3 câu: nêu quan điểm, giải thích và đưa ví dụ ngắn.

예시: I prefer rural areas because they are usually quieter and less crowded. I like visiting the countryside to escape the city's hustle and bustle, for example, walking along quiet paths or sitting by a small river to relax.

제안: Ý chính rõ ràng nhưng câu lộn xộn, thiếu từ/cụm từ, phát âm chỗ tên riêng sai (Buffum?), và sử dụng cấu trúc không chính xác ("so that"). Cần nêu lí do cụ thể, liệt kê ví dụ đúng tên địa danh, và dùng liên từ hợp lý. Giữ 2-3 câu ngắn gọn, chính xác.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I'm familiar with the cities and can travel easily. For instance, I enjoy visiting the Imperial City and the Perfume River, which are close by and full of historical sights.

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes, I do.

Missing comma after introductory sentence for natural speaking rhythm; insert a comma. Use of present tense is correct.

× I quite like taking pictures of different views, especially when I go around the city.

✓ I quite like taking pictures of different views, especially when I walk around the city.

The original is grammatical but 'go around the city' is less natural; use 'walk around the city' or 'go around the city' is acceptable. This is a style suggestion rather than strict grammar.

× I usually take photo of the Perfume river or the streets near the city center.

✓ I usually take photos of the Perfume River or the streets near the city center.

Count noun 'photo' should be plural 'photos' because it refers to more than one. Also proper noun capitalization: 'Perfume River'.

× I think taking picture is beneficial to my physical and mental well-being because it has.

✓ I think taking pictures is beneficial to my physical and mental well-being because it has.

'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match general activity. Note: sentence still incomplete 'because it has' is unclear; likely meant 'because it helps' — that would require verb correction but that falls under other types.

× I think taking picture is beneficial to my physical and mental well-being because it has.

✓ I think taking pictures is beneficial to my physical and mental well-being because it helps me relax and feel happier.

Original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Added 'helps me relax and feel happier' to complete the thought and use correct verb 'helps'.

× I prefer rural areas because they are usually quarter and less crowded in here.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they are usually quieter and less crowded here.

'quarter' is incorrect word; should be adjective 'quieter'. Removed redundant 'in' before 'here'. 'Quieter' is comparative form to compare rural to urban.

× I realize places near the countryside because I can escape from the hustle and bustle the the city I can.

✓ I prefer places near the countryside because I can escape from the hustle and bustle of the city.

'realize' is wrong verb here; use 'prefer'. Removed duplicated 'the' and extraneous 'I can' at end. Added 'of' for 'hustle and bustle of the city'.

× MMM I prefer views in my own country, especially in the because I know the city quite well.

✓ I prefer views in my own country, especially in the city because I know it quite well.

Removed 'in the' before 'because' and replaced with 'in the city' to be explicit; 'it' refers to the city. Present tense 'prefer' is correct.

× There are many tourist attractions so that the Imperial City and Buffum River.

✓ There are many tourist attractions, such as the Imperial City and the Perfume River.

Use 'such as' to introduce examples. 'Buffum River' is likely misspelling of 'Perfume River'; added definite article 'the' before proper nouns.

× I also like the proximity of the places so it is quite easy for me.

✓ I also like how close those places are, so they are quite easy for me to visit.

Original 'the proximity of the places' is awkward; rephrased. Changed 'it is' to plural 'they are' to match 'places'. Made sentence explicit about visiting.