Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 自然で分かりやすい返答にするには、まず直接的なトピック文を述べ、その後に具体的な理由や状況を簡潔に付け加えましょう。文法と語順の誤りを直し、冗長な語（例えば “for example” の誤用）を避けることで、より流暢に聞こえます。具体的には、場所名と理由を明確に結びつけ、接続詞（because, so, which）を正しく使ってください。

예시: Yes, I do. Ulster is a great place for me because the streets and mountains are close together, so I can easily photograph both urban and natural scenes.

제안: 内容は伝わるものの、語順や語の選び方に多くの誤りがあり、意味が曖昧になっています。まずトピック文で好みをはっきり示し、その後で理由を2つくらい具体的に述べましょう。例えば“man-made structures”や“natural landscapes”など適切な語彙を使い、接続詞（because / while / on the other hand）で文をつなげてください。文は1〜3文にまとめ、冗長なフレーズを避けると良いです。

예시: I prefer rural areas because urban places often have many man-made structures that make me feel stressed, while the natural landscapes in the countryside help me relax.

제안: 話の骨組みは良いですが、言い回しが不自然で繰り返しや不要なフィラー（uh）が多く含まれます。比較を述べる場合は簡潔に一文で理由を述べ、その後で具体例（Mount Fuji）を紹介し、なぜ特別かを明確に説明しましょう。百分率や断定表現は控えめにし、“symmetrical”など正確な語彙を使うと印象が良くなります。

예시: I prefer views in my own country, especially Mount Fuji, because it is famously symmetrical and looks the same from both sides, which I find very beautiful.

× Yes, I like for example here in Ulster is very good location for me because the street and mountains are close to each other so I can easily take pictures of both of them.

✓ Yes, for example, Ulster is a very good location for me because the streets and mountains are close to each other, so I can easily take pictures of both.

The original sentence has multiple issues: missing articles, incorrect preposition use, and singular/plural mismatch. Use 'for example' at the start of the clause, use the article 'a' before 'very good location', and pluralize 'streets' to match general meaning. Also remove 'here in' which is awkward; 'Ulster' alone is sufficient. Use a comma before 'so'. Suggestion: Place modifiers (for example) correctly, include necessary articles, and match number (singular/plural).

× I prefer rural areas because in urban areas there are many what created by humans which is made me stressed.

✓ I prefer rural areas because in urban areas there are many things created by humans, which make me stressed.

The phrase 'many what created by humans' is ungrammatical; use 'many things' or 'many structures'. Also 'which is made me stressed' has subject-verb agreement and voice errors: relative clause refers to 'things' (plural), so use 'which make me stressed'. Suggestion: Use 'things' or a specific noun, ensure the relative clause verb agrees with its antecedent, and use active phrasing (they make me stressed).

× On the other hand in rural areas of nature's buildings which is dynamic and let me relax.

✓ On the other hand, rural areas have natural landscapes that are dynamic and help me relax.

'In rural areas of nature's buildings' is incorrect preposition and noun choice. Use 'have' to describe possession ('rural areas have natural landscapes') and replace possessive 'nature's buildings' with 'natural landscapes'. 'Which is dynamic' mismatches number and 'let me relax' should be 'help me relax' or 'allow me to relax'. Suggestion: Use appropriate nouns (landscapes), correct relative clause agreement, and choose verbs like 'help' for causing relaxation."

× I prefer views in my country, Japan in particular Mount Fuji.

✓ I prefer views in my country, Japan; in particular, Mount Fuji.

This sentence needs clearer punctuation and structure to show that Mount Fuji is a specific example. Adding a semicolon or parentheses and commas improves clarity. Suggestion: Use punctuation to separate the general statement and the specific example ('Japan; in particular, Mount Fuji').

× Although many mountains have shaped uh that have that have a difference between right and left.

✓ Although many mountains are shaped so that the right and left sides are different,

The original is fragmented and repetitive ('that have that have'). Use a clearer passive or adjective structure: 'are shaped so that the right and left sides are different.' This corrects redundancy and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: Avoid filler words (uh), remove repetition, and use a concise clause structure."

× Mount Fuji is completely 100% same on right and left.

✓ Mount Fuji looks exactly the same on the right and left sides.

'Completely 100% same' is redundant; use 'exactly the same'. Also add 'looks' or 'appears' to make the sentence grammatical, and specify 'sides' after 'right and left'. Suggestion: Avoid redundancy, include a verb, and specify the object ('sides').