Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unclear phrasing (e.g. “a big fan of people who always go through the photos application”) and grammar errors (e.g. missing articles, tense and pronoun problems). Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas and keep responses under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photos help me preserve memories. For example, when I scroll through my gallery I can revisit places and feelings from past trips. So, photography is a simple way for me to relive special moments.

제안: Good direct answer and supporting example. Improve accuracy and grammar (e.g. “keep me unobstruct backdrops” should be “provide unobstructed backdrops” or “offer open, unobstructed views”). Add a linking word like “so” or “therefore” for flow and vary vocabulary (e.g. “landscape,” “scenery,” “horizon”).

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they offer open, unobstructed backdrops for photography. For example, I can take wide shots of mountains and fields without buildings or traffic getting in the way, so the images feel calmer and more natural.

제안: Answer is relevant but fix grammar (subject–verb agreement: “allow” → “allows”) and be more specific about what you enjoy seeing. Add one concrete example of a country or cultural feature and use a linking word like “because” to explain the reason.

예시: I prefer views from other countries because they allow me to experience different cultures and landscapes. For instance, I enjoy visiting Japan to photograph traditional temples and seasonal gardens, which gives me a fresh perspective compared with familiar scenery at home.

× Yes, definitely, as I'm a big fan of people who always go through the photos application as I'm very sensitive person.

✓ Yes, definitely. I'm a big fan of looking through my photo app because I'm a very sensitive person.

The sentence has pronoun and article issues and awkward phrasing. 'People who always go through the photos application' incorrectly refers to other people; the student means themselves, so use 'looking through my photo app.' 'Photos application' is unnatural; 'photo app' or 'photos app' is better. Also missing article before 'very sensitive person' — add 'a'. Split into two sentences for clarity.

× When I miss those memories, I always go back to the application to review those memories that I used to have.

✓ When I miss those memories, I always go back to the app to review them.

The sentence is wordy and repetitive ('those memories' repeated) and uses awkward 'that I used to have.' Replace with pronoun 'them' and concise phrasing 'go back to the app to review them.' This corrects redundancy and improves clarity.

× I prefer views in rural areas because the open scenery and natural landscape keep me unobstruct backdrops for photography.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the open scenery and natural landscape provide unobstructed backdrops for photography.

'Keep me unobstruct backdrops' is incorrect grammar and word choice. Use 'provide unobstructed backdrops' where 'unobstructed' is the correct adjective form and 'provide' matches the subject 'scenery and landscape.' This fixes adjective form and verb use.

× For example, I can capture wide shots of views or mountains without buildings or traffic getting in its way.

✓ For example, I can capture wide shots of views or mountains without buildings or traffic getting in the way.

'Getting in its way' incorrectly uses singular pronoun 'its' to refer to plural nouns 'buildings or traffic.' Use 'the way' without a possessive, which is idiomatic, or 'their way' if referring back to plural. 'Getting in the way' is the natural expression.

× I would say I prefer the views from other countries as it allow me to explore their traditions and culture and see different viewpoints.

✓ I would say I prefer views from other countries as they allow me to explore their traditions and culture and see different viewpoints.

'It allow' is incorrect subject-verb agreement. The subject is 'views' (plural), so use 'they allow.' Also 'the views from other countries' can be shortened to 'views from other countries.' This corrects agreement and improves flow.