Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more specific and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation sounds, and add one or two brief supporting details using linking words. For example, say why you enjoy it and give a short example of what you like to photograph.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me notice small details and relax. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines, which I later edit and share with friends.

제안: Answer directly with the correct word (rural, not polar), avoid repetition, and use linking words to explain reasons with specific details. Keep it to two or three sentences and correct grammar (agreements, article use).

예시: I prefer rural views to urban ones because the countryside is greener and quieter. For example, rolling hills and small farms offer peaceful scenes that I find more attractive than busy streets.

제안: Respond directly and reduce hesitations. Use correct vocabulary (my country, not using), correct nouns (scenery, people), and give one clear reason with an example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example.'

예시: I prefer views in my own country because the scenery is beautiful and people are friendly. For example, I love visiting the coastal towns here where local markets and sea views create a warm, welcoming atmosphere.

× Yes, I like to take pictures of different views. It seems like, uh, it seems happy for me.

✓ Yes, I like to take pictures of different views. It makes me happy.

The phrase 'It seems like... it seems happy for me' is awkward and ungrammatical. Use 'makes me happy' to express that an activity causes a feeling. This corrects tense and verb choice and produces a natural present-tense statement: 'It makes me happy.' Use simple present for general preferences or feelings.

× I prefer views in polar areas. There are more beautiful than urban areas. They have greeneries and they they look so much beautiful.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas. They are more beautiful than urban areas. They have lots of greenery and they look much more beautiful.

Multiple issues: 'polar' is likely a word-choice error so replace with 'rural' to match the question; 'There are more beautiful than urban areas' is ungrammatical because 'There are' is incorrect and comparative structure is wrong — use 'They are more beautiful than urban areas.' 'Greeneries' is not standard; use 'greenery' or 'lots of greenery.' 'They they look so much beautiful' has a repeated word and incorrect comparative/adjective form — use 'they look much more beautiful.' These corrections keep present-tense preference and fix article/word-form errors.

× Uh, of course I prefer uh, using my country because my country is beautiful compared to other countries.

✓ Of course I prefer my country because it is more beautiful than other countries.

'Prefer using my country' is unnatural; 'prefer my country' is correct. Use 'it is more beautiful than other countries' for a comparative statement. Keep simple present tense for preferences and correct comparative structure.

× For me, uh, they have dinneries and peoples are so much friendly to uh, all.

✓ For me, they have delicious food and people are very friendly to everyone.

Original has several errors: 'they have dinneries' uses a nonstandard noun — 'delicious food' or 'good cuisine' is appropriate. 'Peoples' is incorrect when referring to people in general; use 'people.' 'So much friendly to all' is unnatural — use 'very friendly to everyone.' Also ensure subject agreement: 'they' can refer to 'countries' or 'people', but here 'they have' refers to the country; rephrase for clarity.

× So I always prefer my country as first option.

✓ So I always prefer my country as my first choice.

'As first option' is awkward; 'as my first choice' or 'as my first option' with possessive makes it natural. Use simple present preference 'I always prefer' and include 'my' to clarify possession.