Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and organize your response with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Use linking words (for example, "especially" and "because") and correct small grammar mistakes (e.g., "in sunset" → "at sunset", "as a memories" → "as a memory"). Keep your answer concise (maximum 4–5 sentences).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially at sunset by the sea. For example, I often photograph the warm colors as the sun sets because they create beautiful reflections on the water. I keep these photos as memories of the places I visit.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons using linking words like "because" and "for example." Correct grammar: use plural/singular agreement ("rural areas are better"), and avoid vague phrases ("nothing to see"). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because they have more green space and fresher air. For example, parks and fields make me feel relaxed, while cities often have only buildings and busy roads. That peaceful atmosphere is why I like rural views.

제안: State your preference clearly with a topic sentence and give specific supporting examples. Remove hesitations and fix grammar: say "a lack of beautiful views," "I prefer views in other countries," and finish your sentence. Use linking words like "for example" and mention concrete features (mountains, forests, parks). Keep to 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I find more varied natural scenery abroad. For example, Germany has scenic forests and mountains, and India has lush countryside in many regions. These places offer fresh air and interesting photo opportunities, so I enjoy photographing them.

× Yes, definitely, uh, specially in, uh sunset, I uh, really going, uh, uh, taking pictures and photo for that view, uh, and uh, nearby of the, of the sea. So it is uh, amazing to, uh, take a picture as a memories to that place that you visit.

✓ Yes, definitely. Especially at sunset, I really enjoy taking pictures of that view and the nearby sea. So it is amazing to take pictures as memories of the places you visit.

Multiple issues: 'specially' should be 'especially' (adverb) and 'in sunset' is incorrect preposition; use 'at sunset' (preposition error - ID 11). 'I really going' lacks a verb; correct is 'I really enjoy' (sentence structure/verb form - ID 26 and ID 6). 'taking pictures and photo' is inconsistent; use plural 'pictures' (singular/plural issue - ID 1). 'for that view' should be 'of that view' (preposition error - ID 11). 'nearby of the, of the sea' should be 'the nearby sea' (preposition/article order - ID 11 and 22). 'take a picture as a memories' mixes singular/plural and article use; use 'take pictures as memories' or 'a picture as a memory' (article/plural errors - ID 22 and ID 1). Also 'that place that you visit' better as 'the places you visit' to sound natural (article/pronoun use - ID 22 and 12). Suggestions: use correct prepositions ('at' for times, 'of' for possession), choose correct verb forms ('enjoy taking'), match singular/plural consistently, and simplify to short clear clauses.

× I think rural areas is better than urban areas because you can see that green space would refresh air instead of the of the weather.

✓ I think rural areas are better than urban areas because the green space refreshes the air unlike the city.

Errors: 'rural areas is' is subject-verb agreement; plural subject requires 'are' (ID 27). 'you can see that green space would refresh air' mixes modal 'would' unnecessarily and omits articles; use simple present 'the green space refreshes the air' to describe a general truth (present tense issue and modal usage - ID 6 and ID 4). 'instead of the of the weather' is unclear and incorrect preposition/article use; replaced with 'unlike the city' for clarity (ID 11 and 22). Suggestions: ensure subject and verb agree in number, avoid unnecessary modals when stating general facts, include articles ('the') where needed, and use concise comparisons.

× In the city there is nothing to to see it, just the buildings and roads.

✓ In the city there is not much to see, just buildings and roads.

Errors: double 'to' is a typing/redundancy error and 'see it' is incorrect pronoun use; use 'to see' without 'it' (pronoun and sentence structure errors - ID 12 and 26). 'nothing to see' is grammatically acceptable but 'not much to see' is more natural when followed by 'just buildings and roads' (word choice). Suggestions: remove duplicated words, avoid unnecessary pronouns after infinitives, and choose natural collocations ('not much to see').

× So I prefer rural areas.

✓ So I prefer rural areas.

This sentence is acceptable as written. No correction needed. It correctly uses plural noun with the verb 'prefer' and appropriate article omission for general preference (no grammar problem per provided list).

× Uh, not really in my country, I think there, there are, there are a lack of, uh, beautiful, uh, views that you can see it.

✓ Not really in my country. I think there is a lack of beautiful views to see.

Errors: 'there are a lack of' is incorrect combination; use 'there is a lack of' because 'a lack' is singular (verb agreement and article issue - ID 27 and ID 22). Repetition 'there, there are' is redundant (sentence structure - ID 26). 'views that you can see it' contains an unnecessary pronoun 'it'; use 'views to see' or 'views that you can see' without 'it' (pronoun error - ID 12). Suggestions: use 'there is a lack of' for singular 'a lack', remove repetitions, and avoid adding extra pronouns after relative clauses.

× So I think I prefer to watch views in another country like, uh, Germany and India.

✓ So I think I prefer to see views in other countries, for example Germany and India.

Errors: 'watch views' is incorrect collocation; use 'see views' or 'view scenery' (word choice/adverb/adjective use - ID 13). 'in another country like Germany and India' mixes singular 'another country' with plural examples; use 'other countries' (quantifier/article error - ID 14 and ID 22). Suggestions: match singular/plural when giving examples, use appropriate verbs ('see' for views, 'visit' for places), and prefer 'for example' when listing countries.

× They have that green area and that refresh air to take photos, for example, and you enjoy your.

✓ They have green areas and fresh air for taking photos, so you can enjoy yourself.

Errors: 'that green area' and 'that refresh air' use incorrect demonstrative and adjective forms; use 'green areas' and 'fresh air' (article/adjective errors - ID 17 and ID 13). 'to take photos' should be 'for taking photos' (preposition/verb+ing form - ID 11 and ID 8). 'and you enjoy your' is incomplete and incorrectly uses possessive 'your' instead of reflexive 'yourself' (pronoun/reflexive error - ID 12 and ID 15). Suggestions: use plural nouns for general statements, correct adjective forms ('fresh' not 'refresh'), use gerunds after prepositions, and use 'yourself' for reflexive meaning.