Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words. Use correct verb forms (e.g., "I like" / "I've been taking photos"), countable/uncountable nouns ("pictures"), and clearer reasons (e.g., "because I enjoy discovering small details"). Keep the response to at most 4–5 short sentences.

예시: Yes, I like taking pictures of different views. I often take photos when I go for walks because I enjoy discovering small details like beautiful flowers and unusual architecture. Also, taking pictures helps me express my interest in art and remember places I visited.

제안: Give a direct answer then support it with a clear reason and a brief example. Correct vocabulary and sentence structure (e.g., "I prefer rural views"). Avoid fragmented sentences and unnecessary clauses. Use a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so") to connect your main idea and the explanation.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas. Because I live in Tokyo, which is very busy and crowded, I enjoy the peace and wide open spaces of the countryside. For example, I like photos of fields and mountains since they feel relaxing.

제안: Answer directly and give a concise, coherent reason. Fix pronunciation/spelling issues in writing ("beers" → "views") and grammatical errors ("I want to live in the UK"). Use linking words to avoid repetition and add a specific example of what you want to see in other countries.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I plan to live in the UK in the future and I want to experience different cultures. For example, I would like to photograph historic streets and traditional festivals to learn more about daily life there.

× Yes, I've been taking picture will be different views because I'm good or to find new things such as beautiful flower in the upload and I good art change.

✓ Yes, I've been taking pictures of different views because I like finding new things, such as beautiful flowers, and I enjoy changing my art style.

Errors: 'taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures' (count noun plural). 'will be' is incorrect here; present perfect continuous 'I've been taking' already expresses ongoing action. 'will be different views' is unnecessary. 'I'm good or to find' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is 'I like finding' so use 'I like' or 'I enjoy' plus gerund. 'beautiful flower' needs plural 'beautiful flowers'. 'in the upload' unclear — removed. 'I good art change' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'I enjoy changing my art style'. Suggestion: use 'like/enjoy' + verb-ing for preferences and ensure nouns agree in number and phrases are clear.

× This injury I prefer to see views in rural areas because I am living in Tokyo, which is. Which is town but I use.

✓ At the moment, I prefer to see views in rural areas because I live in Tokyo, which is a city, and I want to experience different landscapes.

Errors: 'This injury' is incorrect; likely 'At the moment' or 'Currently'. Fragment 'which is. Which is town but I use.' is ungrammatical and unclear. 'I am living in Tokyo' is acceptable but simple present 'I live in Tokyo' is more natural for a permanent situation. 'which is a city' corrects 'town' mismatch with Tokyo. 'but I use' is meaningless here and removed. Suggestion: use clear temporal expressions, avoid sentence fragments, and complete relative clauses.

× I prefer beers in other countries because I want to live UK in the future, because I want to see other cultures and I feel other cultures.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I want to live in the UK in the future; I want to see and experience other cultures.

Errors: 'beers' is incorrect word choice—should be 'views'. 'I want to live UK' misses preposition 'in' and article 'the' before 'UK'. Repeated clause 'because I want' is redundant; combined with semicolon for clarity. 'I feel other cultures' is incorrect: use 'experience other cultures' or 'learn about other cultures' instead of 'feel'. Suggestion: choose correct nouns, include necessary prepositions and articles, and use verbs like 'experience' for cultures.