Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid redundancy. Use one clear supporting detail with correct tense and a linking word. Focus on specific memory or feeling evoked by the photo.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because photos help me remember special moments. For example, when I visited Mount Fuji last year, a photo of the summit reminds me of the hike and the clear sunrise, which made the experience unforgettable.

제안: Make the response grammatically correct and slightly more specific. Use a topic sentence, a linking word to add a reason, and one specific detail about what you like in rural views (e.g., sounds, scenery). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer rural views because they make me feel calm and relaxed. For example, when I visited a village in Japan, the quiet fields and fresh air helped me unwind after a busy week. The peaceful atmosphere and natural sounds were especially soothing.

제안: Complete your sentence and avoid vague phrases like "totally different." Provide a clear reason and a specific example. Use linking words to explain why domestic views appeal to you (familiarity, cultural meaning). Keep it concise and fix grammar.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and culturally meaningful. For instance, in Kyoto the historic temples and traditional gardens remind me of family trips and local festivals, so those scenes make me feel comfortable and connected.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I can remind all the memories when I see the pictures.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because the pictures help me remember all the memories when I see them.

The verb phrase 'can remind all the memories' is incorrect; 'remind' is transitive and needs an agent reminding someone or a subject that remembers. Use 'help me remember' or 'remind me of' plus the object. Also replace 'the pictures' pronoun for clarity. Suggestion: use 'help me remember' or 'remind me of' to express recalling memories.

× For example, when I visited the Mount Fuji in Japan I and took a picture I can remind what we did during the mountain.

✓ For example, when I visited Mount Fuji in Japan and took pictures, I could remember what we did on the mountain.

Multiple issues: 'the Mount Fuji' should be 'Mount Fuji' (article error), word order 'I and took' is wrong (sentence structure), and 'can remind' is incorrect as noted earlier. Use past tense 'visited' and 'could remember' to match the past time frame. Use 'on the mountain' for activity location. Suggestions: remove 'the' before proper name, place subjects correctly, and use 'remember' rather than 'remind'.

× I prefer views are in rural area because it makes me so comfortable.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they make me feel very comfortable.

Incorrect structure 'prefer views are in' should be 'prefer views in'. 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' or 'the rural area'. Subject-verb agreement: 'views... they make' not 'it makes'. 'so comfortable' is colloquial; 'very comfortable' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'prefer views in rural areas' and match plural subject with plural verb and appropriate pronoun.

× For example, when I visit village in Japan, I felt so relaxed and comfortable with the views and the atmosphere.

✓ For example, when I visited a village in Japan, I felt very relaxed and comfortable with the views and the atmosphere.

Tense mismatch: 'visit' should be past 'visited' to match 'felt'. Missing article: 'visit village' needs 'a village'. 'so relaxed' is acceptable but 'very relaxed' is clearer. Suggestion: use consistent past tense and include the indefinite article before singular countable nouns.

× I prefer views in my country.

✓ I prefer views in my country.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It matches the present simple preference. Included as confirmation; no errors found.

× I'm from Japan, so in Japan we have a lot of cultural views, especially in Kyoto, because our culture is totally different from the one in other countries.

✓ I'm from Japan, so in Japan we have many cultural sites, especially in Kyoto, because our culture is quite different from cultures in other countries.

'a lot of cultural views' is awkward; 'cultural sites' or 'cultural attractions' is better. 'the one in other countries' is vague and mismatches number; use plural 'cultures in other countries' or 'those in other countries'. Also 'totally different' is informal; 'quite different' is more neutral. Suggestion: replace 'views' with 'sites/attractions' and match plurals.

× So it makes me so comfortable and.

✓ So they make me feel very comfortable.

This fragment is incomplete and lacks a clear subject and verb. 'it makes me so comfortable and.' is unfinished. Replace with a complete sentence referring to the cultural sites or views ('they make me feel very comfortable'). Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and ensure each sentence has subject and verb and completes the thought.