Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., "taking pictures" and "photography" both used), correct article and number errors ("one of my hobby" → "one of my hobbies"). Keep answers within 3–4 sentences and add a specific detail or brief example. Use linking words briefly to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. Photography is one of my hobbies because it lets me find art in everyday scenes. For example, I often photograph city skylines at sunset to capture changing light and mood.

제안: Polish grammar and remove hesitation. Use a clear topic sentence stating preference, then give specific reasons with correct grammar and a concise example. Fix errors such as "this misty fields" → "misty fields" and avoid filler words like "Umm."

예시: I prefer rural views because they offer a peaceful atmosphere and natural scenery. For instance, misty fields at dawn create a soft, tranquil light that I find more inspiring than the busy, noisy city.

제안: Use more natural phrasing and correct grammar. Replace "prefer using my own country" with "prefer those in my own country." Combine short fragmented sentences into a clear, fluent response and avoid repetition ("very beautiful" twice). Provide one concise example with a short explanation of why it appeals.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because many landscapes are beautiful yet overlooked. For example, coastal cliffs and traditional villages offer dramatic textures and local life that you rarely see in tourist guides.

× Personally, photography is one of my hobby and taking pictures as a photographer is one of the most beautiful things because we not only capture specific scenarios but we see art in every view we see.

✓ Personally, photography is one of my hobbies and taking pictures as a photographer is one of the most beautiful things because we not only capture specific scenarios but we see art in every view we see.

The noun 'hobby' requires a plural form when used with 'one of my' to indicate one item among multiple hobbies. Use 'hobbies' rather than 'hobby'. Suggestion: use plural nouns after 'one of my' (e.g., one of my hobbies).

× To me, different views are different forms of.

✓ To me, different views are different forms of art.

The sentence ends abruptly and lacks an object after 'forms of', making it incomplete. Add the missing noun 'art' to complete the thought. Suggestion: ensure prepositional phrases have their objects (forms of art).

× Umm, rural scenes offer natural scenery in the simple beauty of daily life.

✓ Umm, rural scenes offer natural scenery and the simple beauty of daily life.

The original 'in the simple beauty' creates a slightly awkward prepositional relation and may imply incorrect meaning. Replacing 'in' with 'and the' clarifies that rural scenes offer both natural scenery and simple beauty. Suggestion: connect coordinated ideas with appropriate conjunctions and articles for clarity.

× For example, this misty fields which I find more inspiring than the busy, noisy city.

✓ For example, these misty fields, which I find more inspiring than the busy, noisy city.

'Fields' is plural, so the demonstrative must be 'these' not 'this'. Also add commas around the nonrestrictive clause 'which I find...' for correct punctuation. Suggestion: match demonstratives to the number of the noun (this/these, that/those).

× To be honest, I prefer using my own country.

✓ To be honest, I prefer my own country.

'Prefer' is typically followed directly by a noun or by 'to' + verb; 'prefer using' suggests a continuous action that doesn't fit here. Use 'prefer my own country' to state preference. Suggestion: use 'prefer' + noun for simple preferences (prefer X) or 'prefer to' + verb for actions.

× Not only do I love it, but I also think our landscapes are very beautiful and often overlooked.

✓ Not only do I love it, but I also think our landscapes are very beautiful and often overlooked.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable. No correction needed. Explanation: The structure 'Not only... but also...' is used correctly and the clause is coherent. (Included to show checked sentence.)

× For example, our coastal cliffs and traditional villages.

✓ For example, our coastal cliffs and traditional villages are beautiful and often overlooked.

The original fragment lacks a verb and cannot stand alone. Complete the sentence by adding a verb phrase that links to the previous idea, e.g., 'are beautiful and often overlooked.' Suggestion: ensure each sentence contains a subject and a verb to form a complete clause.

× They are often very beautiful and very they offer the scenery people rarely see.

✓ They are often very beautiful and they offer scenery people rarely see.

The original repeats 'very' awkwardly and inserts 'the' before 'scenery' unnecessarily. Remove the extra 'very' and the article 'the' to make the sentence concise and grammatical. Suggestion: avoid redundant words and ensure correct article usage before uncountable nouns like 'scenery' (no 'the' unless specific).