Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: begin with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., "I enjoy" not "I enjoy to"), remove filler phrases like "That's a nice question," and avoid odd words like "you views." Add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "because" or "so") and keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember places and moments. For example, I often print landscape photos from my trips so I can look at them at home. They bring back good memories and make me feel connected to those experiences.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and a clear preference with specific reasons. Fix grammar and odd words (remove "you"). Use linking words (e.g., "because" or "however") and provide one or two supporting details. Keep it within 1–3 sentences.

예시: I prefer rural views because I enjoy green spaces and quiet surroundings. For instance, I like fields and forests where I can relax and take clearer photos without many people around.

제안: Expand the one-word answer into a brief balanced response. Start with a topic sentence ("I like both"), then give specific reasons for each choice using linking words such as "because" and "however." Add one example to make the answer more vivid while keeping it short.

예시: I like views in both my country and other countries. At home I appreciate familiar landscapes and cultural scenes, but when I travel I enjoy discovering new architectures and natural sights that are different from what I'm used to.

× Yes I actually do like taking pictures of different you views.

✓ Yes, I actually do like taking pictures of different views.

The word 'you' is an incorrect pronoun here and seems to be a slip; it interrupts the noun phrase 'different views'. Remove 'you' so the noun phrase is grammatical. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for natural spoken punctuation.

× I enjoy to go back and look at old memories after a long time and I also like to print photos.

✓ I enjoy going back and looking at old memories after a long time, and I also like printing photos.

After the verb 'enjoy' the gerund (-ing) form is required, not the infinitive 'to go'. Use 'enjoy going back and looking' to match standard verb + -ing usage. Also change 'like to print' to 'like printing' for parallelism, and add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses.

× It gives a nice memory all the time when I look at the photo.

✓ It gives me a nice memory every time I look at a photo.

The original has awkward article and pronoun use. Use 'a photo' for a nonspecific photo, and add 'me' to show who receives the memory. Replace 'all the time' with 'every time' for the intended meaning.

× I like every kind of you, at least if it's green.

✓ I like every kind of view, at least if it's green.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrect here; the intended noun is 'view'. Replace 'you' with 'view' to make the sentence meaningful. Keep 'it's' because it refers to 'the view'.

× Both.

✓ I prefer both.

A one-word response 'Both.' is grammatical but incomplete in context. Expanding to 'I prefer both.' gives a clear subject and verb, matching the question and providing a full sentence.