Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and accurate: remove filler words, correct grammar (e.g., "take pictures" not "take a pictures"), and use precise vocabulary. Keep it within 2–3 sentences: a clear topic sentence then 1 supporting detail. Add a linking phrase if giving examples.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing sunrises and sunsets because the light changes the colors dramatically, and I also capture autumn scenes when the leaves turn red and gold.

제안: Answer directly with correct grammar and specific reasons. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and avoid repetition. Provide one or two concrete reasons and an example to make it convincing.

예시: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and less polluted, so I can focus on natural landscapes. For example, I enjoy photographing wide-open fields and mountain scenes where there are few buildings and clear air.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence naming your preference, then support with specific reasons or examples. Correct grammar ("I prefer views in my own country") and name places clearly. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I feel connected to the landscapes and culture. For example, I love photographing places like Mustang and Manang in Nepal, where dramatic mountains and traditional villages create striking images.

× Yeah, I really like to take a pictures of different views like, uh, sunshine and sunset or autumn season and flower bruising pictures tests.

✓ Yeah, I really like taking pictures of different views, like sunshine and sunsets, or scenes from autumn and pictures of blooming flowers.

The phrase 'like to take a pictures' mixes infinitive with an incorrect plural noun form and is less natural than using the gerund 'taking' after 'like'. Use 'taking pictures' (gerund) for general habits. Also 'sunset' should be plural when referring to sunsets in general, and 'flower bruising pictures tests' is incorrect and likely meant 'pictures of blooming flowers'. Use clear noun phrases and correct word forms. Suggestion: Use 'like taking' + plural nouns for general preferences and choose correct vocabulary ('blooming' not 'bruising').

× I prefer views in rural areas because I did not like many pollutions or populations and many peoples, and that's why.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I don't like a lot of pollution or crowded places, and that's why.

Multiple plural and countability errors: 'pollutions' is uncountable and should be 'pollution'; 'populations' and 'peoples' are incorrect in this context—use 'crowded places' or 'large crowds'. Also tense should match present preference ('I prefer' -> use 'I don't like'). Suggestion: Use uncountable noun 'pollution' and neutral phrase 'crowded places' or 'large crowds', and keep verb tense consistent with present preference.

× I prefer my own country, sound city, city of Nepal's like Mustang and Munang.

✓ I prefer my own country, the beautiful cities of Nepal like Mustang and Mustang's surroundings.

This sentence has unclear nouns; 'sound city' is unclear and 'city of Nepal's like' misuses possessive form. Also 'Munang' may be a misspelling of 'Muktinath' or 'Munjang' but preserve intended names. For grammar, use 'the cities of Nepal such as Mustang and Munang' or similar. Ensure correct article use: 'the beautiful cities of Nepal like Mustang and Munang.' Suggestion: Use 'the cities of Nepal such as X and Y' and avoid incorrect possessive constructions.

× That's you. I like to take a pictures that's why.

✓ That's why. I like taking pictures.

'I like to take a pictures' repeats earlier errors: use 'taking' (gerund) and correct noun number 'pictures'. 'That's you' is incorrect phrase here; likely meant 'That's why'. Keep sentences concise and use correct word order. Suggestion: Use 'That's why' to explain reasons and 'I like taking pictures' for the habit.