Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, avoid filler words and repetition, and provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct grammar: use simple present tense and natural phrasing.

예시: Not really. I usually prefer to enjoy the scenery rather than photograph it because I like to focus on the atmosphere and learn about the place’s history. For example, when I visit a historic site I often walk around and read information boards instead of taking photos.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and two specific reasons, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid hesitations and minor grammar errors (use plural forms and correct articles).

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because the air is cleaner and the surroundings are much quieter. For instance, I enjoy hiking in the countryside where there are fewer people and more open spaces, which helps me relax.

제안: Answer directly and give clear reasons with specific examples. Avoid repetition and fix grammar (use present simple and smoother phrasing). Use a linking phrase to add a reason or an example.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultures that I don’t see at home. For example, I once visited a coastal town abroad with unique architecture and scenery, which was a refreshing change from familiar local sights.

× Not really actually when I'm supposed to do to take taking pictures of different views, you know, sometimes I just probably, uh, watch it by myself and ask for the history and just enjoy the beautiful views and.

✓ Not really, actually. When I'm supposed to take pictures of different views, sometimes I probably just watch them by myself, ask about the history, and just enjoy the beautiful views.

The original sentence has wrong verb forms and extra words: 'to take taking' is incorrect duplication; use the base form after 'supposed to' (Grammar ID 8). 'Watch it by myself' uses incorrect pronoun and verb-object agreement; 'them' matches 'pictures' and 'watch' is acceptable. Also remove filler words and add punctuation for clarity. Suggested improvement: After 'supposed to' use the base verb (take). Ensure pronouns match their antecedents (pictures -> them). Use commas or split into sentences to avoid run-on sentences.

× I prefer views in rural areas because I think rural area has a better condition of air and, uh, people around rural is quite quiet and there's not a huge population there.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I think rural areas have better air quality, people in rural areas are quite quiet, and the population is not very large there.

Errors include incorrect singular/plural agreement: 'rural area has' should be 'rural areas have' to match 'views in rural areas' (Grammar ID 1). 'People around rural is' is ungrammatical; use 'people in rural areas are'. Also 'condition of air' is awkward; use 'air quality'. Suggested improvement: Keep number agreement consistent between subjects and verbs (areas -> have). Use standard collocations like 'air quality' and place adjectives before nouns correctly.

× I prefer views in other countries because I can see views in my country normally so that I I I'm looking forward to the different views and I like to travel around and to see the views see.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I can usually see the views in my own country, so I'm looking forward to different views. I like to travel around and see them.

Problems: repeated words ('I I I'm'), unnecessary repetition of 'see the views see', and awkward pronoun use 'my country' vs 'my own country'. Also sentence structure is run-on and needs punctuation (Grammar ID 12 and 26). Replace repetitions and use 'them' to refer back to 'views'. Suggested improvement: Avoid repetition, use pronouns consistently, and break long thoughts into shorter sentences. Use 'usually' for frequency and 'my own country' for clarity.