Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Уменьшите количество пауз и заполняющих слов («uh», «yeah») и используйте более связную структуру: начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте одну или две конкретные детали или пример. Также следите за длиной — не более пяти предложений. Попробуйте заменить разговорные сокращения (’cause) на полные формы для более естественного звучания в экзамене.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because they make me feel calm and help me notice small details. For example, when I photograph a sunset, I focus on the changing colours and the silhouette of nearby trees, which I can look back on later.

제안: Избегайте повторов («both of both of them», «beautiful places») и заполнителей («uh»). Дайте сначала чёткий топик-сентенс о предпочтении, затем приведите по одному конкретному примеру для городских и сельских видов. Используйте связки (for example, while, whereas) для логики ответа.

예시: I prefer both urban and rural views. For example, in cities I enjoy photographing unique architecture and street scenes, whereas in the countryside I like capturing wide-open fields and natural light.

제안: Сократите вступления типа «that's a hard question» и избегайте ошибок в словах («natural visitors»). Дайте прямой ответ, затем два конкретных сравнения (например, familiar landmarks vs new experiences). Используйте связующие слова (at home, while traveling) и корректную лексику.

예시: I enjoy scenery both at home and abroad. At home I appreciate familiar landmarks and the cultural context, while abroad I like discovering new cityscapes and natural landscapes that I have never seen before.

× I love taking pictures of different views 'cause they make me feel calm and peaceful.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views because they make me feel calm and peaceful.

The use of ''cause'' is informal and contracted; replace with ''because'' for standard grammar and clarity. Also the present participle ''taking'' is correctly used here, so only the informal contraction is corrected. Suggestion: use ''because'' in formal responses.

× and also when I, uh, photograph a landscape or a sunset, I can really appreciate the scenery and capture the moment to enjoy later.

✓ And also when I photograph a landscape or a sunset, I can really appreciate the scenery and capture the moment to enjoy later.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; the present participle and verb forms are correct. The only issue was filler ''uh'' and lowercase beginning; begin sentence with a capital letter and remove fillers for clarity. Suggestion: avoid filler words and start sentences properly.

× I prefer, uh, taking pictures from both of both of them 'cause when you take a picture from, uh, urban areas, you can find a special places like beautiful places.

✓ I prefer taking pictures in both urban and rural areas because when you take a picture in urban areas, you can find special, beautiful places.

Errors: redundant phrase ''both of both of them'' (sentence structure error) and wrong use of preposition ''from'' with ''taking pictures'' (should be ''in'') and article/number ''a special places'' mixes singular ''a'' with plural ''places''. Corrections: remove redundancy, use ''in both urban and rural areas'', use plural without ''a'', and place adjectives in correct order. Suggestion: say ''in both urban and rural areas'' and ''special, beautiful places''.

× And also in rural areas there are many, uh, kind of beautiful, uh, views.

✓ Also, in rural areas there are many kinds of beautiful views.

Problem: ''many, kind of beautiful'' is incorrect; correct structure is ''many kinds of beautiful views'' or ''many kind of'' is wrong. Use plural ''kinds'' with ''of'' and place adjectives before noun. Suggestion: use ''many kinds of beautiful views'' or ''many beautiful views''.

× So I prefer both of them.

✓ So I prefer both.

''Both of them'' is redundant after saying ''I prefer both''; concise form is preferred. Grammatically ''prefer both'' is correct. Suggestion: use concise phrasing in spoken answers.

× Oh, that's a hard question to answer.

✓ Oh, that's a hard question to answer.

This sentence is correct. No grammatical correction needed; keep as is. Suggestion: fine for spoken responses.

× At home, I love the familiar landscapes and cultural landmarks.

✓ At home, I love the familiar landscapes and cultural landmarks.

Sentence is correct. 'Landscapes' and 'cultural landmarks' are appropriate plural nouns. Suggestion: no change needed.

× While traveling, I enjoy discovering new cityscapes and natural visitors.

✓ While traveling, I enjoy discovering new cityscapes and natural vistas.

Error: ''natural visitors'' is incorrect noun choice; likely intended ''vistas'' or ''views''. Replace with ''vistas'' or ''natural views.'' Suggestion: use ''natural vistas'' or ''natural views'' to convey scenic landscapes.

× So I would prefer both of them.

✓ So I would prefer both.

As before, ''both of them'' is redundant; ''both'' suffices. Suggestion: keep responses concise: ''I would prefer both.''