Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more concise and fluent. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (“Angles.”), and expand with one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., “scenery,” “panoramic”) and correct small phrasing issues.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because photos can capture a scene from multiple perspectives. For example, when I visit a viewpoint, I usually take several shots to create a panoramic record, so I can remember the place and share the atmosphere with friends.

제안: Provide a direct topic sentence and avoid hesitations and grammar errors. Say clearly that you like both and give one specific reason for each, linked with a connector (e.g., “because” / “while”). Use concrete examples rather than vague phrases like “etcetera.”

예시: I prefer both urban and rural views because each offers different photo opportunities: urban areas have striking architecture and lively street scenes, while rural areas offer tranquil landscapes and local traditions that are great to document.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and refine vocabulary and grammar. Use linking words (e.g., “however,” “while”) to contrast urban and rural features. Replace awkward phrases (“vibrance free life,” “great to photography”) with natural expressions and add one concrete example for clarity.

예시: I like views in both my country and abroad because each place has unique features: urban areas often showcase modern architecture and vibrant street life, while rural areas offer peaceful landscapes and traditional festivals that are wonderful to photograph.

× Actually, I like both areas has uh, we can take shots of multiple scenes from uh and their different cultures, etcetera.

✓ Actually, I like both areas because we can take shots of many different scenes and capture their cultures.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and fragmented (Grammar Problem Type 26). 'Areas has' is incorrect subject-verb structure and does not match the subject; 'has' should not be used. The speaker also uses filler words and an incomplete clause 'from uh and their different cultures'. Correct by joining ideas with 'because' and using plural noun and verbs properly: 'we can take shots of many different scenes and capture their cultures.' Suggestion: plan the sentence before speaking, remove fillers, and connect ideas with conjunctions like because or and for clarity.

× Actually I like both. The urban areas basically offer a variety of scenes like modern architecture and vibrance free life that are great to photography, while in rural areas we have peaceful landscapes and traditions.

✓ Actually, I like both. The urban areas offer a variety of scenes such as modern architecture and vibrant, lively street life that are great for photography, while rural areas have peaceful landscapes and traditions.

The original has several adjective/adverb errors (Grammar Problem Type 13) and preposition/article issues: 'vibrance free life' is incorrect word choice and order; use 'vibrant, lively street life.' 'Great to photography' uses the wrong preposition and the infinitive; it should be 'great for photography.' Also remove unnecessary adverb 'basically.' Suggestion: choose correct adjectives, place them in logical order, and use 'for' with photography to indicate purpose.