Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'a lot of') and correct small grammar issues (use present perfect or simple present consistently).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph coastal scenes and sunrises because the light and colours there change quickly, so I can capture dramatic moments.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give two specific reasons connected with linking words. Vary vocabulary (avoid repeating 'less' and 'amazing') and correct plural/word forms (e.g., 'scenery' is usually uncountable).

예시: I prefer photographing rural areas rather than cities because they have cleaner air and fewer people, so I can take peaceful shots. Also, the natural landscapes, such as rolling hills and small streams, offer varied compositions for my camera.

제안: Give a direct, confident answer and then support it with clear, specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases and fix grammar (e.g., 'someone else country' → 'other countries'; 'a lot of places which are so much beautiful' → 'many beautiful places'). Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer taking pictures in my own country because it has many beautiful landscapes, especially mountain tops and rural areas. For instance, the high ridges and terraces near my hometown provide stunning viewpoints that I know well and can return to at the right time for the best light.

× Yes, I love to take a lot of pictures, especially the places which have sceneries.

✓ Yes, I love to take a lot of pictures, especially of places with beautiful scenery.

The word 'sceneries' is not commonly used in English; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun, so use 'scenery' not a plural. Also use the preposition 'of' after 'especially' to indicate what you take pictures of, and 'places with beautiful scenery' is more natural.

× I took a lot of pictures of seaside, coastal areas or the sun in the sky.

✓ I took a lot of pictures of the seaside, coastal areas, and the sun in the sky.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'seaside' when referring generally to that kind of place. Also use commas and 'and' to join items in a list. 'The sun in the sky' is more natural than omitting 'the.'

× I usually prefer taking pictures in the countryside because there is less pollution, less crowd, less traffic and more nature and beauty where you can find amazing places, amazing sceneries which you can capture in the camera.

✓ I usually prefer taking pictures in the countryside because there is less pollution, less crowding, less traffic, and more nature and beauty where you can find amazing places and scenery to capture with a camera.

'Less' with countable nouns should be 'fewer'; 'crowd' as a noun is countable and here 'crowding' or 'fewer people' is better. 'Amazing sceneries' should be 'scenery' (uncountable). Use 'to capture with a camera' rather than 'in the camera.' Also add commas and 'and' for natural listing.

× I think I would prefer pictures in my own country rather than someone else country because I think my country is a lot of places which are so much beautiful, mostly the countryside and the early regions are so the mountain tops.

✓ I think I would prefer pictures from my own country rather than from someone else's country because I think my country has many places that are very beautiful, mostly the countryside and the high mountain tops.

Use 'from' with 'pictures' and the possessive form 'someone else's.' 'A lot of places' should be 'many places.' 'So much beautiful' is incorrect; use 'very beautiful' or 'so beautiful.' 'Early regions' is unclear; likely 'high' or 'northern' regions; here 'high mountain tops' fits. Also correct word order: 'has many places that are very beautiful.'