Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct verb forms (e.g., "I like to capture"), remove fillers ("uh, umm, you know"), and make sentences concise. Add a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example").

예시: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy capturing panoramic views because they show the scale of a place. For example, when I photograph a sunset over the sea I try to include both the sky and shoreline to preserve the feeling of that moment.

제안: Reduce redundancy and improve vocabulary accuracy: avoid repetitive phrases ("I prefer... I like to capture") and unnecessary fillers. Use linking words to combine reasons logically, and give one concrete example to make the answer specific.

예시: I prefer rural views because they offer more varied natural scenery and a peaceful atmosphere. For instance, I enjoy photographing lush meadows and tree-lined paths, which make me feel refreshed and relaxed.

제안: Correct word choice and sentence structure: use the noun/verb forms correctly ("photography" vs "photograph"), and avoid repetitions like "I like... I like". Start with a clear topic sentence and give one specific example of places you enjoy photographing, using linking words like "for example" or "such as".

예시: I prefer views in my own country because it has diverse landscapes to explore. For example, I often photograph mountains, forests and coastal areas, which gives me plenty of variety without traveling abroad.

× Uh, yes, actually I like capture panoramic views and I like to capture moments.

✓ Uh, yes, actually I like capturing panoramic views and I like to capture moments.

After the verb 'like' when speaking generally about preferences, use the verb + -ing form (gerund). 'Like capture' is incorrect; change to 'like capturing'. The second clause 'I like to capture moments' is acceptable but for parallel structure it's fine to use either both gerunds or 'to' infinitives consistently. Suggestion: use 'I like capturing panoramic views and capturing moments.'

× Umm, you know, it's better to preserve moments because reminds you the moments and times you feel joyful and experienced.

✓ Umm, you know, it's better to preserve moments because they remind you of times when you feel joyful and fulfilled.

The sentence is missing a subject for 'reminds' and uses incorrect word order and word choice. 'Reminds you the moments' should be 'they remind you of times'—the pronoun 'they' refers to 'moments' and 'remind' must agree with plural. 'Experienced' is incorrect in this context; use 'fulfilled' or 'happy'. Also include 'of' after 'remind'. Fixes address subject-verb agreement and preposition use and improve clarity.

× You know, I think there are more scenery and unique landscapes in rural areas and this makes me feel fresh and relaxed.

✓ You know, I think there is more scenery and more unique landscape in rural areas, and this makes me feel refreshed and relaxed.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun and takes singular verb 'is' rather than 'are'. Also 'unique landscapes' is acceptable but to keep consistency with 'scenery' use 'more unique landscape' or better 'more unique landscapes' with 'there are'—choose one. I adjusted to 'there is more scenery and more unique landscape' and changed 'fresh' to 'refreshed' which is the correct adjective to describe a person feeling renewed. Alternatively: 'there are more unique landscapes' with 'there are' and plural.

× I prefer views in my own country because I live in a diverse country and I like to photography from mountains to forests or actually from deserts to coastal areas and I like to explore them.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I live in a diverse country and I like to take photographs from mountains and forests to deserts and coastal areas, and I like to explore them.

'Like to photography' is incorrect because 'photography' is a noun; the correct verb is 'take photographs' or 'photograph'. Also prepositions and lists were awkward: use 'from... to...' structure consistently and pair items clearly: 'from mountains and forests to deserts and coastal areas.' This correction fixes verb choice and simplifies preposition usage.

× You know, I think there are more scenery and unique landscapes in rural areas and this makes me feel fresh and relaxed.

✓ You know, I think there is more scenery and more unique landscape in rural areas, and this makes me feel refreshed and relaxed.

Related to the earlier correction: 'scenery' is uncountable so it requires 'is' not 'are'. The original used 'are' which is incorrect subject-verb agreement for uncountable nouns. Changed 'fresh' to 'refreshed'.