Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and natural, but a bit wordy and slightly repetitive (“enjoy the moment” and “stay in the moment” say the same thing). To improve, start with a concise topic sentence, then give one specific reason and a brief example. Use a linking word (e.g., because, so) to connect your idea and avoid repeating phrases.

예시: No, I don't usually take pictures of views because I prefer to enjoy them with my eyes and be fully present. For example, when I visit a mountain lake I focus on the scenery and the sounds rather than taking photos, which helps me relax.

제안: This response is direct and relevant with a clear reason, but the phrase “relaxes my soul” is a little vague and somewhat informal. To improve, add a specific detail about what you like in rural views (e.g., mountains, fields, quiet) and use a linking word to expand coherently.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because the open fields and quiet forests help me feel calm. For instance, I enjoy walking along countryside trails where the fresh air and green hills reduce stress and clear my mind.

제안: This answer communicates the idea but has grammar errors, unclear phrasing, and repetition. It lacks a clear structure and specific comparisons. To improve, begin with a topic sentence (I can't choose), then give two brief, contrasting reasons with linking words (on the one hand / on the other hand), correct word choice (views, Ireland), and a short example for each side.

예시: I can't choose between them. On the one hand, I love views in my own country because the familiar landscapes and cultural landmarks feel comforting—for example, the coastal cliffs near my hometown. On the other hand, I admire views in places like Ireland and Scotland for their dramatic mountains and historic scenery, which are quite different and exciting.

× I actually don't like taking pictures of different views because I prefer to enjoy the moment with my own bare eyes and stay in the moment without any technological device.

✓ I actually don't like taking pictures of different views because I prefer to enjoy the moment with my bare eyes and stay in the moment without any technological devices.

The phrase 'my own bare eyes' is redundant; 'my bare eyes' is natural. 'Technological device' should be plural 'technological devices' to match general reference to any devices. Suggest using plural when referring to devices in general.

× I personally prefer views in rural areas because nature relaxes my soul and gives me peace.

✓ I personally prefer views in rural areas because nature relaxes my soul and gives me peace.

No grammatical error requiring correction under the given list. Sentence is grammatically correct and fits the question's tense and meaning.

× I really can choose one of them. I in the one hand I prefer weaves in my own country. Our country is just like a heaven. But in other hand there are countries who has beautiful views like Irish countries, Scotland.

✓ I really cannot choose just one. On the one hand, I prefer views in my own country because our country is like a paradise. On the other hand, there are other countries that have beautiful views, such as Ireland and Scotland.

Multiple errors fall under 'Sentence structure errors' and 'Subject-verb agreement' and 'Incorrect use of pronouns' and 'Incorrect use of adjectives' but corrections limited to listed types. Key fixes: 'I really can choose one of them' is incorrect meaning—should be 'cannot choose just one.' 'I in the one hand' -> 'On the one hand' and 'on the other hand' required. 'weaves' is a spelling error; correct word is 'views.' 'Our country is just like a heaven' -> 'like a paradise' (article and word choice). 'there are countries who has' -> 'there are other countries that have' (use 'that' for countries and correct verb agreement 'have'). 'Irish countries, Scotland' is incorrect; use 'such as Ireland and Scotland' or 'Ireland and Scotland.' These changes improve clarity and grammatical correctness.