Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and avoid redundancy. Add one specific reason and use a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I do. I love traveling and taking photos because it helps me capture memories and share the places I visit. For example, I often photograph sunsets and local markets to remember the atmosphere.

제안: Good clear answer with reasons. Improve by using a linking word and adding one concrete example to make the response more vivid and specific.

예시: I prefer rural views because they feel more natural and peaceful, so they help me relax. For instance, seeing open fields and quiet rivers helps me forget city stress and recharge.

제안: The answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors and vague words. Clarify the topic (you probably meant 'views' or 'landmarks'), correct grammar, give a clear reason and a concrete example. Use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because local landmarks reflect our culture and history. For example, visiting the old town square and traditional festivals shows visitors our customs and makes me proud.

× I'm a person who loves traveling around everywhere and I think it's quite meaningful that record the beautiful view.

✓ I'm a person who loves traveling everywhere, and I think it's quite meaningful to record beautiful views.

The original sentence has a sentence structure problem: the clause 'that record the beautiful view' is ungrammatical because 'that' cannot introduce an infinitive 'record' here. Replace it with the infinitive 'to record' and make 'beautiful views' plural to match general meaning. Also remove the redundant 'around' and add a comma before the coordinating conjunction for clarity. Suggestion: use 'to record' after verbs expressing opinion (think it is meaningful to...).

× I really like the views in the countryside because they feel more natural and peaceful and can help me to relax and forget the trivial troubles in the city.

✓ I really like views in the countryside because they feel more natural and peaceful and can help me relax and forget the trivial troubles of the city.

There is an unnecessary 'to' before 'relax' because after 'help' both the base verb and 'to' + verb are possible; using the base verb 'help me relax' is more natural. Also 'the views' can be 'views' or 'the countryside views'; both are acceptable. Change 'in the city' to 'of the city' to better express possession of the troubles. Suggestion: prefer 'help me relax' and 'troubles of the city' for natural phrasing.

× I really like the wheels in my own country because it is special and meaningful.

✓ I really like the festivals in my own country because they are special and meaningful.

The original uses 'wheels' which is semantically odd in this context; likely the student meant 'wheels' as a misused word for 'wheels' is plural but then 'it is' creates disagreement. This is a sentence structure and word choice problem. Change to a suitable noun like 'festivals' or 'customs' and make verb agreement plural ('they are'). Ensure subject and verb agree in number.

× It shows our native culture and can help people to know the serious yeah.

✓ They show our native culture and can help people learn about our traditions and history.

The sentence has pronoun and sentence structure problems: 'It' does not agree with a corrected plural subject (festivals/customs), so use 'They'. 'Help people to know the serious yeah' is ungrammatical and vague. Replace with a clear phrase like 'help people learn about our traditions and history'. Also remove filler 'yeah'. Use 'help people learn about' rather than 'help people to know'. Suggestion: state specific things people will learn and ensure pronoun agreement.