Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and vary vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition of the same phrase (“taking pictures” / “views”) and correct small awkward phrases (e.g., “makes my memories strong”).

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing landscapes because images help me remember trips vividly. For example, when I look at a sunset photo on my phone, it instantly brings back the location and atmosphere.

제안: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence (state preference or say you like both). Use linking words (however, for example) and give complete specific examples. Avoid incomplete sentences and grammatical errors (e.g., “visit to” → “visit”). Limit to 2–4 sentences for clarity.

예시: I like views in both urban and rural areas, but if I must choose I prefer rural scenery. For example, when I visit Himachal or Uttarakhand, the mountain sunrises and sunsets are breathtaking; in contrast, urban views are interesting for architecture and city lights.

제안: Clarify your main idea and avoid word errors (“juice” is incorrect). Provide a clear reason and one specific example. Use linking words such as because or for example, and avoid vague phrases like “so much.”

예시: I prefer views in my own country because they are easier to visit and I know the best spots. For example, when I travel to the mountains here, I can enjoy stunning panoramas of peaks and valleys without the hassle of international travel.

× I love taking pictures of different views because I think that makes my memories strong.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views because I think they make my memories stronger.

Pronoun reference and comparative adjective: 'that' is unclear for plural 'pictures', so use 'they'. 'Memories strong' is ungrammatical; use the comparative 'stronger' to show increased vividness. Also ensure subject-pronoun agreement (they make). Suggestion: replace 'that' with 'they' and use 'stronger'.

× Whenever I open my phone I can see the photos and remember the place and I really love taking pictures of views.

✓ Whenever I open my phone I can see the photos and remember the place, and I really love taking pictures of views.

Run-on sentence: two independent clauses joined with 'and' require a comma before 'and' for clarity. Tense and structure are otherwise correct. Suggestion: add a comma to improve readability.

× I think I love views in both the areas but it depends on the place.

✓ I think I love views in both areas, but it depends on the place.

Incorrect article use: 'both the areas' should be 'both areas' without 'the'. Also add a comma before 'but' to separate clauses. Suggestion: remove 'the' and add comma.

× If in urban area I visit to Himachal side or Uttarakhand side, they have so much breathtaking views.

✓ If I visit the urban areas in Himachal or Uttarakhand, they have so many breathtaking views.

Multiple errors: word order and preposition ('If in urban area I visit to' is incorrect). Use 'If I visit the urban areas in Himachal or Uttarakhand'. Quantifier and adjective order: 'so much breathtaking views' is wrong; 'so many breathtaking views' is correct because 'views' is countable. Suggestion: reorder sentence and use 'many' with countable noun.

× The sunsets are very good, the sunrise are also very beautiful.

✓ The sunsets are very good, and the sunrises are also very beautiful.

Subject-verb agreement and pluralization: 'sunrise are' is incorrect. Use plural 'sunrises' to match plural verb 'are'. Also add 'and' to connect clauses. Suggestion: pluralize 'sunrise' and include conjunction.

× But if I talk about the rural areas I can see.

✓ But if I talk about rural areas, I can see beautiful scenery as well.

Incomplete sentence: 'I can see' needs an object. Add what is seen (e.g., 'beautiful scenery') to complete the thought and add a comma after the subordinate clause. Suggestion: complete the sentence with an object describing what is seen.

× I prefer juice in my own country because we can visit.

✓ I prefer staying in my own country because we can visit many places.

Word choice error: 'juice' is nonsensical in context; likely intended 'just' or 'staying' or 'life'. It maps to incorrect adjective/adverb/word use. Replace with 'staying' or 'being' or 'traveling' depending on meaning; here 'staying' + added clarification 'many places' makes sentence logical. Suggestion: use appropriate verb like 'staying' or 'traveling'.

× When I visit the mountains, I can see so much breathtaking and very beautiful views there.

✓ When I visit the mountains, I can see so many breathtaking and very beautiful views there.

Quantifier and adjective order: 'so much' should be 'so many' for countable 'views'. Also redundancy in 'breathtaking and very beautiful' is acceptable but can be streamlined. Suggestion: use 'so many' and consider reducing redundancy to 'so many breathtaking views'.