Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundancy and correct common errors (e.g., plural/singular, collocations).

예시: Not really — photography isn’t one of my hobbies. I do take photos occasionally, though, when a scene really impresses me, like a dramatic sunset or a beautiful mountain view, because those moments are worth remembering.

제안: Be specific and use accurate expressions. Start with a clear preference, then explain with one or two concrete reasons and link them smoothly. Fix grammar (e.g., "peaceful and relaxing" not "peaceful and relaxation") and avoid vague phrases.

예시: I prefer rural views, especially green fields and trees, because they make me feel peaceful and relaxed. For example, walking through a countryside trail after work helps me unwind and clear my mind.

제안: Clarify your meaning and use correct vocabulary. Give a direct answer, explain reasons with specific examples, and avoid unclear phrases like "wheels or land." Also correct grammar and sentence fragments. Keep to at most 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer landscapes in other countries because they offer more variety and new experiences. For instance, I’d love to see fjords in Norway or terraced fields in Asia — places I haven’t visited yet — which feel more exciting than familiar local scenery.

× Well, to be honest, taking picture is not my cup of tea because I don't feel interested in.

✓ Well, to be honest, taking pictures is not my cup of tea because I'm not interested in it.

The noun 'picture' needs the plural form 'pictures' (or 'a picture') when speaking generally; this is an article/number choice issue related to article errors. Also 'don't feel interested in' is ungrammatical: use the adjective 'interested' with a subject complement 'in it' or the verb phrase 'I'm not interested in it.' Suggestion: use 'taking pictures' for general activities and 'I'm not interested in it.' Use: 'taking pictures' + 'I'm not interested in it.'

× However, I rarely take a picture whenever the scene is really impressed.

✓ However, I rarely take a picture unless the scene is really impressive.

The verb/adjective form is incorrect: 'impressed' is the past participle describing a person who is impressed; the scene should be described by the adjective 'impressive.' Also the conjunction 'whenever' is not appropriate for a rare action; 'unless' or 'only when' fits better. Suggestion: use 'impressive' to describe scenes and 'unless' or 'only when' to show a condition.

× Well, my preference is Lulu area scenes because whenever I see green fields and trees, it can give me a sense of peaceful and relaxation.

✓ Well, I prefer rural area scenes because when I see green fields and trees, they give me a sense of peace and relaxation.

Several issues: 'Lulu area' seems wrong—likely 'rural area.' The original sentence has awkward structure 'my preference is... because whenever...' Rephrase to 'I prefer...' for natural speech. 'Can give me a sense of peaceful and relaxation' mixes adjective and noun incorrectly: use the noun 'peace' and 'relaxation.' Also subject agreement: 'they give' (fields and trees) rather than 'it.' Suggestion: say 'I prefer rural area scenes' and 'they give me a sense of peace and relaxation.'

× I can unwind after a busy day.

✓ I can unwind after a busy day.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present ability (modal 'can' + base verb). No change needed. Keep simple present ability to express a habitual result.

× I prefer wheels or land other country landscapes because in my own country it only has a limited sense and I have already been there most of them. What I'm interested in.

✓ I prefer landscapes of other countries because my own country feels limited and I have already been to most of the places I'm interested in.

Multiple structural and word-choice errors: 'wheels or land other country landscapes' is nonsensical—use 'landscapes of other countries.' 'In my own country it only has a limited sense' misuses pronouns and 'sense'; reword to 'my own country feels limited.' 'I have already been there most of them' mixes pronouns; correct to 'I have already been to most of the places.' The fragment 'What I'm interested in.' should be combined into the previous sentence. Suggestion: restructure the sentence to clearly state preference and reason: 'I prefer landscapes of other countries because my own country feels limited and I have already been to most of the places I'm interested in.'