Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Content and intention are clear, but there are multiple grammar and word-choice errors and some awkward phrasing. Keep answers natural and concise (max 5 sentences). Use correct verbs and nouns (e.g., "sharing" not "shaving", "photos" not "shoes", "hikes" not "heights"). Add one linking phrase when giving an example. Practice pronunciation and accuracy of common words related to photography.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing scenery because it helps me preserve memories and revisit places later. For example, I often share landscape photos from my weekend hikes so my friends and family can enjoy the views too.

제안: The answer is relevant and offers specific reasons, but contains grammatical errors and slight disfluency. Use correct verb tense ("I grew up"), singular/plural consistency ("architecture" or "architectural styles"), and combine short fragments into coherent sentences using linking words (e.g., "Moreover," "For example,"). Keep within five sentences and avoid sentence fragments.

예시: To be honest, I prefer urban areas because I grew up in the countryside and now enjoy the variety and architecture of cities. For example, I like the mix of historic churches and modern skyscrapers, and I appreciate the cultural activities cities offer, such as museums and diverse restaurants. Moreover, efficient public transport makes it easy to explore.

제안: Good idea and relevant examples, but many grammar and cohesion problems reduce clarity. Use correct sentence structure (e.g., "China is very large and extremely diverse in scenery"). Avoid inserting unclear place names ("Preston" likely wrong) and ensure logical connectors. Keep examples concise and link them clearly to the main point (e.g., "For instance,").

예시: I prefer views in my own country because China is very large and extremely diverse in scenery. For instance, I can enjoy the breathtaking mountains of Yunnan, the modern skyline of Shanghai, and the beautiful coastlines of Hainan, all without traveling overseas, which feels more convenient and comfortable for me.

× I also like shaving those photos with friends and family.

✓ I also like sharing those photos with friends and family.

The student used 'shaving' which is a wrong word (spelling and collocation error) and does not fit the intended meaning. The correct verb is 'sharing'. Use 'sharing' to talk about distributing photos to others. Improve by checking verb meaning and spelling; think of common collocations like 'share photos'. Grammar problem type ID:13

× For example, I often post a landscape shoes from my weekend heights so others can enjoy the views too.

✓ For example, I often post landscape shots from my weekend hikes so others can enjoy the views too.

This sentence contains multiple word choice and spelling errors: 'shoes' should be 'shots' (photos), and 'heights' should be 'hikes' (walks). 'A landscape shots' should be 'landscape shots' (no article with plural). Also 'post' is fine. Improve by proofreading for similar-sounding words and checking noun forms and articles. Grammar problem type ID:13

× To be honest, I prefer urban areas because I grow up in the countryside and now I enjoy the variety and architectures of cities.

✓ To be honest, I prefer urban areas because I grew up in the countryside and now I enjoy the variety and architecture of cities.

The clause describing past upbringing needs past tense: 'grow up' should be 'grew up'. 'Architectures' is uncountable in this context; use 'architecture'. Maintain consistent tense by using past for past events and present for current preferences. Improve by matching verb tense to time expressions and using correct noun forms. Grammar problem type ID:5

× For example, I like the mix of historical churches and modern buildings, and I appreciate the cultural activities and convenience cities offer, such as museums, diverse restaurants. And the efficient public transport.

✓ For example, I like the mix of historical churches and modern buildings, and I appreciate the cultural activities and convenience cities offer, such as museums, diverse restaurants, and efficient public transport.

The original has a sentence fragment 'And the efficient public transport.' and punctuation that breaks parallel structure. Combine items in a single parallel list and remove the stray period. Also 'diverse restaurants' is fine; ensure consistent commas between list items. Improve by keeping list items parallel and avoiding sentence fragments. Grammar problem type ID:26

× As far as I'm concerned, I prefer views in my own country because China is a very huge and as extremely diverse scenery.

✓ As far as I'm concerned, I prefer views in my own country because China is very huge and extremely diverse.

Problems: 'a very huge' is awkward — 'huge' does not take an article here; 'as extremely' is incorrect. 'scenery' is a mass noun that doesn't fit after those adjectives in this structure. Remove 'a' and 'as' and the noun 'scenery' or rephrase to 'has extremely diverse scenery'. Improve by choosing correct article use and adjective patterns or rephrasing as 'China has extremely diverse scenery.' Grammar problem type ID:22

× For example, I can enjoy breathtaking mountains in Yunnan and the modern skylines of Shanghai and Preston coastlines in Hainan, all without needing to travel overseas, which makes sightseeing. There and more comfortable for me.

✓ For example, I can enjoy the breathtaking mountains in Yunnan, the modern skyline of Shanghai, and the pristine coastlines of Hainan, all without needing to travel overseas, which makes sightseeing there more comfortable for me.

Multiple issues: 'Preston coastlines' seems wrong — likely 'prestine' or 'pristine' misspelled and misplaced; 'skylines' singular/plural consistency should match the city (use 'skyline' for Shanghai), and word order 'which makes sightseeing there more comfortable for me' needs correction. The phrase 'There and more comfortable for me' is ungrammatical and should be integrated. Improve by checking correct adjectives ('pristine'), noun forms, and combining clauses to avoid fragments and misplaced modifiers. Grammar problem type ID:26}]}escape_statement;base64_encoded:false}