Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and concise: start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., 'beautiful views' not 'burnt views'), avoid redundancy, and add one or two specific examples linked with connectors. Keep answers under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. For example, I often capture cityscapes at sunset because the light makes the buildings look dramatic. I also like photographing flowers and wildlife when I visit parks, as they offer vivid colors and interesting details.

제안: Answer directly which you prefer, use linking words to contrast (e.g., 'however', 'on the other hand'), avoid filler words, and give a specific reason or example to support your choice.

예시: I prefer rural views. Although cities can have interesting architecture, rural areas offer peaceful scenery such as rolling mountains and flower-filled meadows, which I find more relaxing and photogenic.

제안: State your preference clearly, use correct grammar (e.g., 'I prefer views in other countries'), avoid vague reasons like 'nice wallpaper', and provide a specific example of a country or type of view you like. Keep it concise and linked with a reason.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they offer a wider variety of landscapes. For instance, when I visited Japan I admired the combination of modern skyscrapers and traditional temples, which provided very different and memorable photo opportunities.

× Absolutely, I like taking pictures of the burnt views because my hobby was taking picture of a nice views and the different style of pictures and photograph.

✓ Absolutely, I like taking pictures of beautiful views because my hobby is taking pictures of nice scenes and different styles of photography.

Original sentence has multiple issues: incorrect adjective 'burnt' (likely wrong word choice), tense mismatch ('was' should be present 'is' to match ongoing hobby), singular/plural errors ('picture' vs 'pictures', 'a nice views' incorrect article and plurality), and awkward word order with 'and photograph'. Correct by choosing appropriate vocabulary ('beautiful views', 'scenes', 'photography'), fixing tense to present simple for a habitual hobby, making nouns plural where needed, and simplifying the phrase order.

× Some creatures are exotic and rare, animals, flowers and perhaps some nice views like buildings and everywhere.

✓ Some creatures, such as exotic and rare animals and flowers, are interesting, and I also enjoy nice views like buildings and landscapes.

The original sentence has poor structure and unclear listing. 'Some creatures are exotic and rare, animals, flowers' is a confusing apposition. Rearrange into a clear list with 'such as' and separate ideas with conjunctions. Replace vague 'everywhere' with 'landscapes' to specify views.

× Some areas in the urban areas are very, uh, rare views I saw in the urban areas because some of the urban areas are very traffic congested.

✓ Some places in urban areas offer rare views I have seen, but many urban areas are very traffic-congested.

Repetition ('areas in the urban areas') and awkward phrasing ('rare views I saw in the urban areas') make the sentence unclear. Use 'places in urban areas' to avoid repetition, change tense to present perfect 'I have seen' for experience, and use the adjective 'traffic-congested' instead of 'very traffic congested'.

× But the rural areas have many views like mountains, flowers and uh, very natureful views.

✓ But rural areas have many views such as mountains and flowers, and very natural scenery.

'Very natureful' is not correct English; use 'natural' as the adjective and 'scenery' as the noun. Remove extra article 'the' before 'rural areas' for general statements and use 'such as' to introduce examples.

× I would like to prefer in other countries because in other countries has a excellent views like the views of the other country have a nice wallpaper into your computer or to your cell phone and other country has a many types of views like mount big mountains and big buildings.

✓ I would prefer other countries because they have excellent views that can make nice wallpapers for your computer or phone, and other countries offer many types of scenery, such as tall mountains and large buildings.

Multiple errors: 'would like to prefer in other countries' is incorrect — use 'would prefer other countries'; 'in other countries has a excellent views' lacks subject and has article/plural mistakes ('an excellent view' or 'excellent views'); awkward clauses about wallpapers need restructuring; 'a many types' incorrect quantifier; 'mount big mountains' is ungrammatical. Rewrite sentence to supply correct subject-verb agreement, articles, quantifiers, and natural adjective order ('tall mountains', 'large buildings').