Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g., "I could I could", "for to remind the picture memories"). Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly. Aim for 2–3 sentences and use precise vocabulary such as "memories", "perspectives", "scenery".

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because photos let me revisit the scenery and different perspectives later. For example, a landscape photo can remind me of the weather, colors, and atmosphere of that moment.

제안: Start with a direct answer, then give specific supporting reasons using clear linking words. Correct awkward phrases (e.g., "are the nature of that place", "some natures"). Use vocabulary relevant to scenery (e.g., "landscapes", "greenery", "mountains"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences, and avoid repeating ideas.

예시: I prefer rural views to urban ones because I love natural landscapes and greenery. For instance, I enjoy seeing rolling hills, forests, and mountains because they feel peaceful and colorful compared with city streets.

제안: Answer directly and clearly, then give specific reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid vague or confusing phrases (e.g., "even though I didn't visit or I didn't even know that views"). Explain what makes foreign views special (unique culture, different landscapes). Limit to 2–3 well-formed sentences and use descriptive vocabulary like "unique", "distinct", "breathtaking".

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they often show landscapes and cultures different from what I'm used to. For example, I find foreign architecture and coastal scenery especially fascinating because they offer unique colors, styles, and atmospheres I haven't seen at home.

× Yes, I do, because if I took a picture of different views, I could I could look at the picture for the various perspectives.

✓ Yes, I do, because if I take pictures of different views, I can look at the pictures from various perspectives.

The sentence mixes conditional forms and repeats 'I could'. For present habitual meaning, use the zero/first conditional or simple present: 'if I take... I can...' Also use plural 'pictures' to match 'different views' and 'from various perspectives' is the correct prepositional phrase. Remove repeated 'I could'.

× So I think it's really great for to remind the picture memories, yes.

✓ So I think it's really great for reminding picture memories, yes.

The sequence 'for to remind' is ungrammatical; use either 'to remind' or 'for reminding'. 'Remind' here functions with a gerund 'reminding'. Also 'picture memories' is an odd collocation but acceptable; consider 'to remind me of memories' for clarity.

× For views, I think I prefer rural areas to urban areas because most of the rural areas are the nature of that place and I really love some natures like that colored green like grass, mountains, trees.

✓ For views, I think I prefer rural areas to urban areas because most rural areas have natural scenery, and I really love nature that is green, like grass, mountains, and trees.

Problems: 'most of the rural areas' is better as 'most rural areas'; 'are the nature of that place' is ungrammatical—use 'have natural scenery' or 'are natural'; 'some natures' is incorrect—'nature' is uncountable. Reorder adjectives: 'green' describes 'nature'. Use commas before list items.

× So I think I would like rural areas.

✓ So I think I like rural areas.

The original 'I would like rural areas' sounds conditional or polite preference; in this context a simple present 'I like rural areas' fits the general preference. This corrects unnecessary modal 'would' used for habitual preference.

× I prefer views in other countries because in my country, even though I didn't visit or I didn't even know that views, it feels like similar for me.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because, for views in my country that I haven't visited or don't know, they feel similar to me.

Tense and structure issues: mixing past tense 'didn't visit' with general preference is awkward. Use present perfect or present: 'haven't visited' or 'don't know'. Also 'that views' is ungrammatical—use 'views' or 'those views'. 'Feels like similar' should be 'feel similar to me' and match plural 'views' with plural verb 'feel'.

× But in other countries views it's really a new thing for me.

✓ But views in other countries are really new to me.

Word order and agreement: 'other countries views' should be 'views in other countries'. Also use plural agreement 'views ... are' and 'new to me' is the appropriate phrase. Remove the redundant 'it’s really a'.

× So it's really, it looks gorgeous and fascinating.

✓ So they look really gorgeous and fascinating.

Pronoun and agreement: 'it' is incorrect for plural 'views'; use 'they' or 'they look'. Place adverb 'really' before adjectives and use plural verb 'look' to agree with 'views'.