Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more concise and use present tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and one brief example. Reduce repetition and avoid long, run-on sentences by using linking words like “because” or “so”.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember places I’ve visited. For example, I often photograph mountain landscapes so I can recall the atmosphere and weather of a trip later.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with one or two specific reasons using linking words. Eliminate hesitations and correct singular/plural form errors (e.g., “rural areas provide”). Use more precise vocabulary such as “polluted” vs “less polluted”.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they offer clean air and wide green spaces. For instance, I enjoy photographing fields and forests that feel peaceful, whereas city views often look crowded and polluted.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and one clear supporting detail. Avoid repeated fillers and correct grammar (e.g., “my country” not “my countries”, “four seasons” not capitalized). Be specific about how seasons change the scenery and give one concrete example.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because it has four distinct seasons and varied landscapes. For example, the mountains are snow-capped in winter while coastal areas become lively and colorful in summer.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because it helped me to keep a memory of the place I visited and in future if I see those pictures I can remember the best of my memories I spent there.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because they help me keep a memory of the places I visit and in the future, if I see those pictures, I can remember the best memories I made there.

Mixed tenses and verb forms: the student uses past tense 'helped' but is describing a general habit, so present simple 'help' is correct. 'A memory of the place I visited' is awkward—plural 'places I visit' matches general habit. Use 'in the future' for time phrase and add commas for clarity. 'The best of my memories I spent there' is ungrammatical; 'the best memories I made there' is natural English. Suggestions: Use present simple for habits, pluralize when speaking generally, and use natural collocations like 'memories I made.'

× I usually prefer views of a rural area, umm rural area because rural area provide the environment with fresh air and greenery whereas in urban areas, due to high tech cities and uh modernization, it is uh little polluted as compared to rural areas.

✓ I usually prefer views of rural areas because rural areas provide an environment with fresh air and greenery, whereas urban areas, due to high-tech cities and modernization, are a little more polluted compared to rural areas.

Subject-verb agreement and article use: 'rural area provide' is incorrect because the plural subject 'rural areas' requires 'provide.' Also use 'an environment' or omit article; 'it is little polluted' is incorrect—use 'are a little more polluted' to match plural 'urban areas.' 'High-tech' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective. Suggestions: Ensure subject and verb agree in number, use articles correctly, and match adjectives to plural subjects.

× I definitely like the views in my own country because uh, in my countries we have Four Seasons and we have uh, different landscapes, uh, from uh, mountains to sea level and uh, uh, due to different seasons, every season uh, in every area shows its def different.

✓ I definitely like the views in my own country because in my country we have four seasons and different landscapes, from mountains to sea level, and because of the different seasons each area looks different.

Incorrect pronoun and noun number: 'in my countries' should be 'in my country' when referring to a single country. 'Four Seasons' should be lowercased as 'four seasons' unless it's a proper noun. 'Every season in every area shows its def different' is ungrammatical and unclear; rephrase to 'because of the different seasons each area looks different.' Suggestions: Use singular/plural consistently, avoid filler words, and produce clear clause structure like 'because... and...'.