Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and clear with a topic sentence, use correct grammar and concise supporting details. Start with a clear statement (e.g., Yes, I enjoy photographing different views), then briefly explain why with specific examples and simple linking words. Avoid repetition and fix subject-verb agreement and word order.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because each setting has its own character. For example, urban scenes often feature tall buildings and busy streets, while rural views show open fields and natural landscapes. Because of these contrasts, I like capturing both kinds of scenery.

제안: Give a direct answer (state preference), then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fillers and incomplete sentences. Correct word choice and complete thoughts are important.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the architectural variety and lively street scenes. For instance, city skylines, cafes and markets give me interesting subjects to photograph.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give specific, coherent reasons using linking words. Combine short fragments into full sentences and avoid awkward phrases like 'Nature Trip'. Mention concrete examples or comparisons to strengthen your answer.

예시: I prefer the views in my own country because we have many mountains, beaches and forests that I find beautiful. For example, I can visit nearby national parks and coastal areas, so I can easily explore and photograph diverse natural scenes.

× Yes, I like taking picture different views because they have a different nature like urban views and their views is different the urban because the urban views more likely.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because they show different kinds of scenery, such as urban views, and the urban views are different.

Multiple pluralization and article errors: 'taking picture' should be 'taking pictures' (plural). Missing preposition 'of' after 'pictures'. 'they have a different nature' is unclear; use 'they show different kinds of scenery'. 'their views is' has subject-verb disagreement and wrong pronoun—replace with 'the urban views are different'. Also remove redundant phrase 'because the urban views more likely' and rephrase to a clear comparative or descriptive clause. Suggestions: use plural nouns correctly and include necessary prepositions, and keep subject and verb in agreement.

× Yes, I prefer, uh, Orban areas because it's more than.

✓ Yes, I prefer urban areas because they offer more.

Wrong pronoun and verb form: 'it's' (it is) is incorrect when referring to 'urban areas' (plural). Use 'they' and a complete verb phrase like 'offer more'. Also spelling: 'Orban' should be 'urban'. Suggestion: match subject plurality with correct pronoun and complete the comparative idea.

× I prefer the view of my own country because there are so many mountains, beautiful places like beach and forest. They have a lot of. Nature Trip.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because there are so many mountains and beautiful places like beaches and forests. There are also many opportunities for nature trips.

Pluralization and article errors: 'view' should be 'views' to match plural examples. 'places like beach and forest' needs plural nouns: 'beaches and forests', or include articles ('a beach and a forest'). 'They have a lot of. Nature Trip.' is fragmented and unclear. Rephrase to 'There are also many opportunities for nature trips.' Suggestions: use plural forms for multiple items, avoid sentence fragments, and connect ideas with complete clauses.