Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, use past tense correctly and add one specific supporting detail with linking words. Also correct grammar (articles, verb forms) and reduce repetition.

예시: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me remember places I've visited. For example, when I traveled to Europe last year, I took many landscape photos of city skylines and coastlines, which I later organized into an album.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, explain one clear reason with a linking word, and use accurate vocabulary (e.g. 'urban areas', 'coast', 'mountains'). Be specific about what you like in urban views and avoid vague phrases.

예시: I prefer urban views because I live in a city and I enjoy the variety of sights it offers. For instance, urban areas often combine modern architecture with nearby parks or waterfronts, so I can photograph both skyscrapers and the coast in one place.

제안: Answer directly with a topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, umm), and provide a clear reason and brief comparison using linking words (however, whereas). Use correct words (e.g. 'scenery' instead of 'future').

예시: I like both domestic and foreign views because each offers different attractions. For example, my country has beautiful natural scenery and familiar cultural sites, whereas other countries often have unique architectures and landscapes that I haven't seen before.

× 'I like taking a picture of different view.'

✓ 'I like taking pictures of different views.'

'picture' and 'view' should be plural because the speaker refers to taking many pictures of various views. Use plural nouns for general, countable items when speaking about them in general.' Suggestion: use 'pictures' and 'views' when referring to more than one.'

× 'for example I like trip when I was travel to Europe I have a lot of take pictures.'

✓ 'For example, I liked trips when I traveled to Europe; I took a lot of pictures.'

'like trip' is incorrect: use 'liked trips' or 'liked a trip' depending on meaning. The sequence describes past events, so verbs should be in simple past: 'liked', 'traveled', 'took'. Also word order and auxiliary usage were wrong. Suggestions: use past tense consistently for past events and restructure the sentence into clearer clauses.'

× 'I prefer urban to rural because I live in urban area.'

✓ 'I prefer urban areas to rural areas because I live in an urban area.'

'prefer X to Y' is correct but 'urban' and 'rural' need plural nouns when speaking generally: 'urban areas' and 'rural areas'. Also 'in urban area' needs the article 'an' before a singular countable noun. Suggestion: use plural when generalizing and include articles for singular countable nouns.'

× 'Urban has a good nature, for example sea mountain like this.'

✓ 'Urban areas have good natural scenery, for example the sea and the mountains.'

'Urban' alone used as a noun is awkward; use 'urban areas'. 'Good nature' is unnatural; use 'good natural scenery' or 'nice nature'. 'Sea mountain like this' is ungrammatical; list nouns with articles: 'the sea and the mountains'. Suggestion: use appropriate noun forms and articles and more natural collocations like 'natural scenery'.'

× 'Uh, I think I like both because umm, my country has great future, uh, nature, but other country has also great nature.'

✓ 'I think I like both because my country has great natural scenery, and other countries also have great natural scenery.'

'has great future' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'beauty' or 'natural scenery'. 'Other country has also great nature' needs plural 'other countries' when speaking generally, and word order 'also have great natural scenery'. Maintain present simple but correct noun forms and plurality. Suggestion: replace 'future' with 'natural scenery' or 'natural beauty', use plural for 'other countries', and place 'also' before the verb.'

× 'I cannot compare.'

✓ 'I cannot compare them.'

The verb 'compare' requires an object when used transitively: 'compare A and B' or 'compare them'. Here the speaker is comparing two kinds of views, so provide the object 'them' or specify what cannot be compared. Suggestion: add the object: 'I cannot compare them' or 'I cannot compare the views.'