Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 어휘와 문법 오류가 있습니다. 응답은 직접 질문에 대한 주제 문장으로 시작했지만, 불필요한 반복과 어색한 표현(예: “picture of taking picture”)이 존재합니다. 개선을 위해 다음을 연습하세요: 1) 명확한 주제 문장 사용(예: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views). 2) 중복을 피하고 문장을 간결하게 연결하는 연결어 사용(e.g., also, especially). 3) 구체적 세부사항 추가(어떤 장면을 찍는지, 어떤 카메라나 기법을 사용하는지). 4) 문법(시제, 관사) 점검. 예문은 최대 3문장으로 유지하세요.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I often take pictures with my friends and like to capture candid moments, so I try various poses and angles. Also, I sometimes experiment with lighting to make the photos more interesting.

제안: 의미 전달이 모호하고 단어 선택 오류가 있습니다(예: “lower areas” → 아마 ‘rural’). 응답 구조가 단순하고 구체적인 이유가 부족합니다. 개선을 위해: 1) 정확한 어휘 사용(rural, urban). 2) 주제 문장 후 이유와 예시 추가(왜 도시/시골을 선호하는지). 3) 연결어 사용으로 문장 흐름 강화(However, because, although). 4) 문장 수를 2~3문장으로 유지하고 구체적 배경 설명을 포함하세요.

예시: I prefer rural views because I enjoy peaceful landscapes and open spaces. However, I live in a big city, so I often photograph urban scenes like streets and architecture. When I visit the countryside, I focus on nature backgrounds like fields and rivers.

제안: 문법 오류와 어순 문제가 있으며 내용이 불분명합니다(예: “I prepare the Danang Danang view”). 응답은 구체적 경험을 포함하려는 점은 좋지만 시제와 표현을 바로잡아야 합니다. 개선을 위해: 1) 시제 일치(예: I travelled / I visited / I am planning). 2) 장소 이름을 한 번만 명확히 언급하고 그 이유를 구체화(특색, 분위기, 활동). 3) 연결어로 이유와 예시를 논리적으로 제시(For example, because, such as). 4) 최대 3문장으로 간결하게 답변하세요.

예시: I prefer views in other countries; for example, I loved the scenery in Da Nang when I visited last year. The city had many bicycles and lively local markets, which made the streets very photogenic. I enjoy photographing such cultural scenes because they feel authentic and vibrant.

× I often take a picture with my friends.

✓ I often take pictures with my friends.

Plural noun after a frequency expression: use 'pictures' because it refers to multiple occasions. Use plural to match general habitual action. Suggestion: change singular 'a picture' to plural 'pictures' when talking about regular activities.

× And I like picture of taking picture of them, so I tried different posing.

✓ And I like taking pictures of them, so I try different poses.

Several issues: incorrect noun form and word order ('like picture of taking picture of them' is ungrammatical), tense inconsistency ('tried' vs habitual meaning), and incorrect noun form 'posing' instead of 'poses'. Use gerund 'taking' after 'like', plural 'pictures' and plural countable noun 'poses' for variety. Use present tense 'try' to match 'I like' (habitual). Suggestion: use 'I like taking pictures of them' and 'I try different poses'.

× I love lower areas but I live in urban city so I take a picture in the city a lot.

✓ I love rural areas but I live in an urban city, so I take pictures in the city a lot.

Word choice error: 'lower areas' is incorrect; use 'rural areas'. Article error: 'an urban city' requires 'an'. Number agreement: use plural 'pictures' for habitual action. Also add comma before 'so'. Suggestion: say 'I love rural areas' and 'I take pictures'.

× But I do like nature background.

✓ But I do like a natural background.

Word form errors: 'nature' should be adjective 'natural' to modify 'background', and countable noun requires an article 'a' when singular. Alternatively use plural 'natural backgrounds' if speaking generally. Suggestion: use 'a natural background' or 'natural backgrounds' depending on meaning.

× I prepare the Danang Danang view because I traveling there.

✓ I prepared the Da Nang view because I traveled there.

Tense and form errors: 'prepare' and 'traveling' mismatch. Use past tense 'prepared' and 'traveled' to indicate a completed action. Also correct place name formatting to 'Da Nang'. If meaning is habitual future/present, use 'I prepare the Da Nang view because I am traveling there' but here past is more natural. Suggestion: match tenses and use past forms for completed visits.

× There are so many bicycle and local market in the city, so I like that.

✓ There are so many bicycles and local markets in the city, so I like that.

Countable nouns should be plural when preceded by 'so many': change 'bicycle' to 'bicycles' and 'local market' to 'local markets'. Suggestion: use plural forms for countable nouns with 'so many'.