Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and grammar by producing a concise topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and article use (e.g., "pictures of different views"). Avoid fillers like "you know."

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because each place shows unique natural features and local life. For example, I often photograph rivers and old streets to capture how people live and how the landscape changes throughout the year.

제안: Make a clear comparison using correct grammar and linking words. Start with a direct statement of preference, then explain reasons with concrete details. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "prefer urban views to rural ones") and avoid unclear words like "muse" or "opened views."

예시: I prefer urban views to rural ones because cityscapes show architectural variety and lively street scenes. For instance, I enjoy photographing modern buildings and busy markets that reflect how the city develops over time.

제안: Give a direct answer followed by clear, specific reasons. Fix grammar and repetition (e.g., "the views in my own country are more natural"). Explain what "natural" means with examples and avoid vague comparisons like "small small."

예시: I prefer views in my own country because the landscapes are more natural and varied, such as mountains, forests and coastal areas. For example, I like photographing native plants and traditional villages that I rarely see abroad.

× Yes, I like taking picture different views because of a different of nature, different places, different town, different story, like you know, talking.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because of the variety of nature, places, towns, and stories, like, you know, talking.

Errors: missing plural 'pictures' and missing preposition 'of' after 'taking pictures'; awkward phrase 'a different of nature' should be 'the variety of nature' or 'different aspects of nature'; inconsistent plural forms for places and towns. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to multiple items (pictures, views, places, towns); include 'of' after 'taking pictures'; rephrase to parallel list structure and use articles appropriately.

× I like muse in urban areas than rural areas because I opened views is more on on development the city.

✓ I prefer urban areas to rural areas because the views show more of the city's development.

Errors: 'muse' is incorrect word choice and should be 'prefer'; comparative structure should be 'prefer A to B' not 'like A than B'; 'opened views is more on on development the city' is ungrammatical — likely intended 'the views show more of the city's development'. Suggestion: use 'prefer ... to ...' for comparisons, choose correct verbs (prefer, show), and use possessive form 'city's' and 'more of' to indicate extent.

× I like view on my own country because the view there is so very natural nature like the other country is a small small.

✓ I like the views in my own country because they are very natural, while the views in other countries are smaller in scale.

Errors: 'I like view on my own country' should be 'I like the views in my own country' (use plural and preposition 'in' and definite article 'the'); 'the view there is so very natural nature' duplicates words—use 'very natural'; 'like the other country is a small small' is unclear — interpreted as 'other countries have smaller-scale views'. Suggestion: use 'the views in my country' or 'views of my country', ensure noun-number agreement, avoid redundant words, and make comparisons clear with 'while' or 'whereas'.