Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, grammatical, and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fragmented phrases and unclear words (e.g., “scenery events,” “in our,” “race”).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. For example, I often photograph natural landscapes like beaches and mountains because their colours and lighting change throughout the day, so I always try to capture them when the light is best.

제안: Answer directly with a clear preference and give a specific reason using linking words. Replace hesitations and vague words with precise descriptions (e.g., “rural areas,” “peaceful atmosphere”). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they are quieter and more peaceful. For instance, I like photographing rice fields and small villages since the natural light and open space create a calm, attractive scene.

제안: Give a clear preference and support it with specific reasons or an example. Avoid grammatical errors (e.g., say “Vietnam” not “a Vietnam”) and vague claims like “most tourist spot.” Use linking words to explain why you prefer foreign views.

예시: I prefer views in other countries, especially places like Vietnam, because they offer different cultures and landscapes. For example, Vietnam’s coastline and historic towns provide unique photo opportunities that I don’t see at home, so I enjoy travelling there to take pictures.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different scenery events in our.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different sceneries here.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and unclear phrase 'scenery events in our.' This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Use the plural 'sceneries' or 'scenery' as an uncountable noun depending on meaning; here 'different sceneries' or 'different scenic views' fits. 'Our' is incomplete; replace with 'here' or 'in my country' to clarify location. Suggestion: say 'different scenic views here' or 'different sceneries here.'

× Especially if the race is.

✓ Especially if the scene is interesting.

Fragment 'Especially if the race is.' is incomplete and unclear, making it a sentence structure error (ID 26). 'Race' is likely a mischoice for 'scene' or 'event.' Complete the dependent clause by specifying an adjective (e.g., 'interesting') and ensure it attaches to the previous sentence: 'I especially like it when the scene is interesting.'

× Too good.

✓ It's very good.

Fragment 'Too good.' lacks a subject and verb, a sentence structure error (ID 26). Replace with a complete clause like 'It's very good' or attach it to the previous sentence: 'The scene is very good.'

× I always take a picture.

✓ I always take pictures.

Singular 'a picture' is grammatical but sounds odd when talking generally; preference for plural 'pictures' fits context. Main issue is sentence naturalness and consistency: use plural 'pictures' for habitual action. This is treated as sentence structure error (ID 26) for clarity.

× I prefer views in early.

✓ I prefer views in the countryside.

'In early' is incorrect and incomplete; likely the student meant 'in the countryside' or 'early in the morning.' This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Choose the intended meaning: if comparing rural areas, 'in the countryside' is appropriate; if time was meant, say 'early in the morning.'

× Yes, uh, rather than urban areas.

✓ Yes, rather than urban areas.

The filler 'uh' is acceptable in speech but unnecessary in a corrected response. Removing it improves clarity. The main issue is disfluency/conjunction placement; categorized as incorrect use of conjunction/flow (ID 16). Provide the concise comparative phrase: 'rather than urban areas.'

× Where is it? There's so much peace.

✓ Rural areas are much more peaceful.

Original 'Where is it? There's so much peace.' is unclear and disjointed. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Combine the idea into a clear comparative statement: 'Rural areas are much more peaceful' or 'There is so much peace there.'

× I prefer views in another country, especially in Vietnam.

✓ I prefer views in other countries, especially in Vietnam.

Use plural 'other countries' when speaking generally; original 'another country' followed by 'especially in Vietnam' is inconsistent. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Match number and generality: 'other countries' fits the question about own country versus other countries.

× I think a Vietnam is the most tourist spot in the country.

✓ I think Vietnam is the most popular tourist destination in the country.

Original has incorrect article 'a Vietnam' and awkward phrase 'most tourist spot.' This is an article error (ID 22) and adjective use problem (ID 13). Country names do not take 'a.' Use 'Vietnam' without an article and the noun phrase 'tourist destination' or 'tourist spot.' Also 'the country' is ambiguous; if referring to Vietnam itself, say 'in the country' or better 'in my opinion, Vietnam is the most popular tourist destination.'