Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (e.g., “umm”), and clarify any odd words (like “UMM”) or replace them with concrete examples. Add one brief reason or example to support your statement using a linking word (e.g., “because” or “for example”).

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially landscapes when I travel, because they capture the atmosphere and memories. For example, I often photograph mountain vistas and city skylines to remember my trips.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence first (e.g., “I prefer rural areas”), avoid repetition and hesitations, and use clearer linking words to support your choice. Provide one specific reason and an example to make your answer concrete and within the 5-sentence limit.

예시: I prefer rural areas, especially in India, because they offer more natural scenery and varied landscapes. For example, I enjoy photographing rolling hills and traditional villages, which feel more peaceful than busy city streets.

제안: Begin with a clear direct response (e.g., “I prefer views in other countries”), remove fillers like “umm,” and give a concise reason and an example to explain your preference. Mention one specific contrast (e.g., novelty, variety) to strengthen your answer.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering new cultures and landscapes. For example, I like photographing coastal towns abroad since their architecture and scenery often differ from what I see in India.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views, especially UMM when I'm traveling, but not of myself.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views, especially umm when I'm traveling, but not of myself.

The original sentence uses 'UMM' in uppercase which is not a grammar error but a stylistic/orthographic issue; however this list focuses on grammatical types. The only relevant correction is to render the hesitation marker in lowercase ('umm') so it reads naturally in spoken English. Keep the verb forms 'do like' and 'I'm traveling' because they correctly express habitual preference and an action in progress.

× Depends on what kind of urban area we're talking about, because if we're talking about India then I would rather pre prefer rural areas because they have more sceneries, they have more landscapes and they're just pretty.

✓ It depends on what kind of urban area we're talking about, because if we're talking about India then I would rather prefer rural areas because they have more scenery, they have more landscapes and they're just pretty.

Multiple issues matched the allowed types: missing subject ('Depends' needs 'It depends' — sentence structure/subject-verb agreement) and redundant word 'pre prefer'. Main grammar types from the list: 14 Incorrect use of quantifiers (use of 'sceneries' is incorrect; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun) and 26 Sentence structure errors (fragment 'Depends...' lacks subject). Corrections: add subject 'It' to form complete sentence; remove duplicated 'pre'; change 'sceneries' to uncountable 'scenery'. Suggestions: always include a subject for clauses (It depends...), avoid duplicated words, and use 'scenery' as uncountable noun (not 'sceneries').

× Depends on what kind of urban area we're talking about, because if we're talking about India then I would rather pre prefer rural areas because they have more sceneries, they have more landscapes and they're just pretty.

✓ It depends on what kind of urban area we're talking about, because if we're talking about India then I would rather prefer rural areas because they have more scenery, more varied landscapes, and they're just pretty.

Additional improvement: 'more landscapes' is acceptable but can be tightened to 'more varied landscapes' for clarity. The key grammatical issue is the uncountable noun 'scenery' (not 'sceneries'), so use 'scenery' or rephrase as 'more varied landscapes'. Also ensure conjunctions and commas for natural flow.

× I have lived most of my life in India even though I haven't visited every part of India.

✓ I have lived most of my life in India, even though I haven't visited every part of the country.

No major tense error; present perfect 'have lived' correctly expresses life experience continuing to present. Suggested improvement: replace repeated 'India' with 'the country' to avoid redundancy and add a comma before 'even though' for clarity. This fits allowed types (6 Present tense issue) as a minor stylistic correction related to tense reference and cohesion.

× I'm aware that there are very beautiful places in India, but umm, for myself, I would rather choose other countries.

✓ I'm aware that there are very beautiful places in India, but umm, personally, I would rather choose other countries.

Replace awkward reflexive 'for myself' with 'personally' for natural English. The verb forms are correct ('I'm aware', 'would rather choose'). This aligns with allowed type 10 (Verb in the present participle form) indirectly by focusing on natural spoken phrasing. Suggestion: use 'personally' to express personal preference and avoid unnecessary reflexive phrasing.