Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Говоря об этом вопросе, вам нужно дать более прямой и связный ответ: начните с короткого утверждения (да или нет), затем добавьте одно-два конкретных примера. Избегайте заиканий и лишних пауз, сокращайте повторения (например, не говорить «I I'm», «M»). Используйте связки для плавного перехода, например «for example» или «such as».

예시: Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views. I usually focus on landscapes and cityscapes, for example when I travel I photograph skylines and parks. I also take portraits of my family, but I enjoy capturing wide scenes because they show the atmosphere of a place.

제안: Ответ должен быть ясным и логичным: выберите одно предпочтение и объясните причину с конкретной деталью. Уберите тавтологию («usually I want calm places and usually I want nice places») и грамматические ошибки. Используйте связки («because», «although», «however») для объяснения контраста между городом и деревней.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the energy and architectural variety of cities. For example, city streets and historic buildings often offer interesting textures and lighting that I like to photograph. Although rural scenes are peaceful, I find urban landscapes more inspiring for my photos.

제안: Дайте чёткое мнение и подкрепите его конкретной причиной или примером. Избегайте междометий и повторов («uh», «umm», «I, I»). Конкретизируйте, что именно вам нравится в видах родной страны (природа, культура, свет, архитектура) и добавьте связку («for example», «because»).

예시: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and meaningful to me. For example, I love the countryside near my hometown, with its rolling hills and traditional villages, which remind me of family memories. Although I enjoy visiting other countries, local landscapes are my favourite because of their cultural significance.

× I never really thought about it because I I'm used to taking photos M myself, my families, but I do take photos of landscapes and city views.

✓ I never really thought about it because I'm used to taking photos of myself and my family, but I do take photos of landscapes and city views.

The original sentence has disfluencies and incorrect word forms: duplicated 'I' and stray 'M', and 'families' should be singular 'family' to match 'my'. This is a sentence structure and word choice issue. Suggestion: remove the extra 'I' and 'M', use 'I'm' for 'I am', and use 'my family' as the correct possessive noun phrase. Ensure the sentence flows: 'I never really thought about it because I'm used to taking photos of myself and my family, but I do take photos of landscapes and city views.'

× Well, I'd say I'd prefer views in urban areas.

✓ Well, I'd say I prefer views in urban areas.

Using 'I'd say I'd prefer' is redundant and awkward. The conditional 'I'd' (I would) before 'prefer' is unnecessary here. This is a sentence structure issue. Suggestion: use either 'I'd say I prefer' or 'I'd prefer', but not both; 'I'd say I prefer' is more natural for expressing an opinion.

× In urban and rural areas, buzz because it's there are different vibes, aesthetics.

✓ In urban and rural areas, there's a buzz because there are different vibes and aesthetics.

The original has several issues: 'buzz because it's there are' mixes contractions and clauses incorrectly; 'aesthetics' needs 'and' to connect with 'vibes'. This combines sentence structure and article/auxiliary verb misuse. Suggestion: use the contraction 'there's' for 'there is' when introducing 'a buzz' and then 'there are' for 'different vibes and aesthetics': 'there's a buzz because there are different vibes and aesthetics.'

× Usually I want calm places and usually I want nice places.

✓ Usually I prefer calm and pleasant places.

Repeating 'usually I want' is redundant and 'want' is less natural than 'prefer' when discussing general preferences. This is a sentence structure and word-choice issue. Suggestion: combine ideas into one concise sentence using 'prefer' and an adjective pair: 'Usually I prefer calm and pleasant places.'

× Oh, obviously, I absolutely love uh, views of my own country.

✓ Oh, obviously, I absolutely love the views of my own country.

While the original is understandable, adding the definite article 'the' before 'views' is more natural when referring to specific views of one's country. This is an article usage/present tense nuance. Suggestion: include 'the' for clarity: 'I absolutely love the views of my own country.'

× Umm, I, I really into my our uh, great step and I never, umm, change it to uh, something different.

✓ Umm, I'm really into our great landscape and I would never change it for something different.

The sentence has pronoun confusion ('my our'), missing verb ('really into' needs 'am'), and incorrect verb tense/auxiliary ('never change' should be 'would never change' to reflect habitual preference or hypothetical). This is pronoun, verb omission, and tense/modal usage. Suggestion: choose the correct possessive pronoun ('our'), include the verb 'am' after 'really', and use 'would never change' or 'wouldn't change it for something else' to sound natural: 'I'm really into our great landscape and I would never change it for something different.'