Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers like "kinda" and repetition. Also correct grammar (use a single clause structure and accurate connectors).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. Although photography can be challenging and requires some skill, I find it rewarding, so I practice regularly and experiment with framing and light to improve.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific reason with an example; avoid repeating the same phrase. Use linking words like "because" and give a concrete detail to support your preference.

예시: I prefer urban views because cities offer more visual variety. For example, I like photographing architecture, busy streets and colorful markets, which give me different subjects and textures to explore.

제안: Avoid strong negative statements about your country and reduce repetition. Begin with a direct answer, then give a single, specific reason or example. Use careful phrasing for opinions (e.g., "I prefer" rather than absolute claims) and check grammar and repetition.

예시: I generally prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing different cultures and landscapes. For instance, I hope to travel to Europe to photograph historic buildings and coastal scenery that I don't often see at home.

× Although taking pictures is kinda hard and needs special skills but I love doing it even though I'm not very skilled and I'm an amateur.

✓ Taking pictures is kind of hard and requires special skills, but I love doing it even though I am not very skilled and I am an amateur.

This sentence improperly combines 'Although' and 'but', creating a run-on/contradictory conjunction structure (Grammar Problem Type ID: 26). Remove the redundant subordinating conjunction and use a single contrasting conjunction ('but') or restructure the sentence. Also replace informal 'kinda' with 'kind of' and 'needs' with 'requires' for better formality. Use full forms 'I am' instead of contractions for clarity.

× I prefer urban areas because there is so much more details and so many things that are interesting, so much details.

✓ I prefer urban areas because there are so many more details and so many interesting things.

The noun 'details' is plural and must use the plural form of the verb 'to be' (are) rather than 'is' (Grammar Problem Type ID: 1). Also 'so much more details' is incorrect quantifier and order; use 'so many more details'. Avoid repeating 'so much details' which is ungrammatical and redundant.

× I prefer urban areas because there is so much more details and so many things that are interesting, so much details.

✓ I prefer urban areas because there are many more interesting details and things to see.

The original repeats ideas and uses awkward phrasing (Grammar Problem Type ID: 26). Condense for clarity: use 'many more interesting details and things to see.' Ensure subject-verb agreement ('are') and correct quantifier 'many' for countable nouns.

× Actually I love other countries and my biggest goal in my life is to migrate to another country to see more beautiful things because I I believe that there is little attractions in my own country and I don't really like it.

✓ Actually, I love other countries, and my biggest goal is to move to another country to see more beautiful things because I believe there are few attractions in my own country and I don't really like it.

Multiple problems: repeated 'I' is a typographical/repetition error and should be removed (Grammar Problem Type ID: 26). 'Migrate to another country' is acceptable but 'move to another country' is more natural here. 'There is little attractions' mixes singular 'is' with plural 'attractions' and uses the wrong quantifier; use 'there are few attractions' for plural countable nouns (Grammar Problem Type IDs:1 and 14). Also add commas for clarity.