Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm), correct grammar (use gerund after 'like' and plural/forms), and add one specific reason or brief example. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use a linking word for coherence.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me capture memorable moments. For example, when I visit a new park I take photos of the scenery to remember the colors and layout. This also improves my photography skills.

제안: Give a clear direct answer first, then briefly explain why with a specific contrast. Reduce hesitations and use linking words like 'both' with 'because' or 'however' to compare. Fix grammar (e.g., 'I prefer both because they offer different views' and 'I always take pictures').

예시: I prefer both urban and rural views because they offer different kinds of beauty. Urban scenes have striking architecture and lively streets, while rural areas provide peaceful landscapes and natural colors. Therefore I like photographing both to get a variety of images.

제안: Answer directly and give a concise reason with a specific detail. Avoid repetition and fillers. Use correct sentence patterns (e.g., 'I prefer views in my own country because we have many green areas') and add a contrasting sentence about occasionally traveling abroad. Keep total length under 4 sentences.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because we have many beautiful green areas that feel familiar and comforting. However, I sometimes travel abroad to photograph different cultures and landscapes, which broadens my perspective.

× Yes, I like to uh, taking a picture in different views because it helps me.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because it helps me.

Use of 'like' followed by infinitive or gerund requires consistency: 'like taking' (gerund) is correct; 'taking a picture in different views' is awkward—use plural 'pictures' and preposition 'of' for 'pictures of views'. Suggestions: use 'I like taking pictures of different views.'

× It is umm, it is just give me a perfect thing.

✓ It just gives me a perfect feeling.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice: 'it is just give' is incorrect; third-person singular requires 'gives'. 'Thing' is vague; 'feeling' or 'sense' fits better. Suggestion: 'It just gives me a perfect feeling.'

× I prefer to, uh, views in uh, both uh, because they are having a different uh, views.

✓ I prefer both because they have different views.

'Prefer to views' is ungrammatical; 'prefer' can take a noun (both) or 'to prefer A to B'. 'They are having' is incorrect progressive; use simple present 'have'. Also 'a different views' mismatches article and plural. Suggestion: 'I prefer both because they have different views.'

× So I always umm, taking a picture in urban and rural areas and I also umm, but I, umm.

✓ So I always take pictures in urban and rural areas.

After 'always' use base verb 'take' (simple present), not gerund 'taking'. Remove the incomplete trailing clause. Suggestion: 'So I always take pictures in urban and rural areas.'

× Umm, I prefer, uh, to view in my own country because, umm, I like to uh, I in here so many, umm, we have to seen, so we have to see so many green areas in our country.

✓ I prefer to view places in my own country because I live here and we have many green areas to see.

Several errors: 'prefer to view in my own country' needs object 'places' or 'views'; 'I in here' should be 'I live here'; 'we have to seen' is wrong tense and structure — use 'we have' or 'there are many green areas to see.' Suggestion: 'I prefer to view places in my own country because I live here and we have many green areas to see.'

× But sometimes I like to, uh, go and go abroad and.

✓ But sometimes I like to travel abroad.

Redundant 'go and go' and an incomplete ending. Use 'travel abroad' or 'go abroad' once to convey meaning. Suggestion: 'But sometimes I like to travel abroad.'