Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct noun forms and articles, simplify sentence structure, and avoid redundant phrases. Add a clear topic sentence then 1–2 supporting details with linking words. Be specific about what you like to capture (e.g., colors, silhouettes) and why.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing landscapes, especially at sunrise and sunset. At those times the light is warm and dramatic, which makes even simple scenes look beautiful, so I often go out to capture the colors and the atmosphere.

제안: Work on accuracy and coherence: correct word choice (prefer 'rural areas' not 'few'), avoid repetition, and clarify reasons with linking words. Mention specific advantages (darker skies, less light pollution) and one example of what you do (use long exposures on hills).

예시: I prefer rural areas, especially for night photography, because the countryside is darker and there is less light pollution. Therefore I can capture stars and wide landscapes using long-exposure shots from quiet fields or hills.

제안: Avoid blunt or negative statements about your country and fix grammar. Provide a clear reason and specific detail or example instead of vague remarks. If you mean there are fewer scenic spots, say so politely and explain what you look for abroad.

예시: I tend to prefer views in other countries because I enjoy exploring different landscapes and cultures. For example, I like visiting coastal regions abroad where there are dramatic cliffs and varied scenery that I don't often find at home.

× Yes, I enjoy taking photo of landscape especially at sunrise or sunset, the like at whose time look warm and dramatic, which makes even simple scenery beautiful.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking photos of landscapes, especially at sunrise or sunset, when they look warm and dramatic, which makes even simple scenery beautiful.

The original has incorrect quantifiers and singular/plural forms: 'photo' should be plural 'photos' and 'landscape' should be 'landscapes' to match general meaning. 'the like at whose time look' is ungrammatical; use 'when they look' to refer to the landscapes at that time. Improve by using plural nouns for general statements and a clear relative/time clause: 'especially at sunrise or sunset, when they look...'.

× So I often go out to capture the color and the atmosphere.

✓ So I often go out to capture the colors and the atmosphere.

The sentence is mostly correct but 'color' in the context of landscapes is more natural as plural 'colors'. This is a quantifier/plural choice within sentence structure. Use 'colors' to refer to the variety seen in scenes: 'capture the colors and the atmosphere.'

× I prefer few in rural areas, especially for night photography because the countryside is darker and the stars and landscape are more feasible.

✓ I prefer rural areas, especially for night photography, because the countryside is darker and the stars and landscapes are more visible.

'I prefer few in rural areas' is incorrect—'few' is the wrong quantifier here; use 'rural areas' directly or 'the countryside' to express preference. 'More feasible' is incorrect when describing visibility; use 'more visible'. Also 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match general meaning. Rewrite to keep intended meaning: 'I prefer rural areas... because... the stars and landscapes are more visible.'

× I find city like this riding so I usually go to quiet files or hills that take long exposure exposure of.

✓ I find cities like this noisy, so I usually go to quiet fields or hills to take long-exposure shots.

This sentence has multiple issues: word choice ('riding' is incorrect; likely 'noisy'), singular/plural ('city' -> 'cities' to generalize), and repeated word 'exposure exposure'. 'Files' is a typo for 'fields'. The purpose phrase should be 'to take long-exposure shots' or 'to take long exposures'. Correct the vocabulary and structure: 'I find cities like this noisy, so I usually go to quiet fields or hills to take long-exposure shots.'

× I prefer in another country because my country is so boring.

✓ I prefer other countries because my country is so boring.

'Prefer in another country' is incorrect preposition and singular form; use 'prefer other countries' or 'prefer to be in another country'. Also 'another country' is singular while comparing generally; 'other countries' fits the question about preference for views 'in your own country or in other countries'. This fixes preposition and plural usage.

× My country don't have CD.

✓ My country doesn't have any attractions.

'My country don't have' is subject-verb disagreement: 'country' is singular, so verb should be 'doesn't have'. 'CD' is unclear; likely a wrong or incomplete noun. I replaced with 'any attractions' to convey the intended meaning that the country lacks interesting sites. If the student meant a specific item, replace 'CD' with the correct noun and keep 'doesn't have'.