Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is enthusiastic and on-topic but needs clearer structure, fewer repetitions, and more precise vocabulary. Start with a concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific details linked with a cohesive connector. Avoid redundant phrases like “different views” and unnecessary filler.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of scenic views. For example, I often capture mountain sunsets and reflections on lakes because the light and colors are striking, and these photos help me preserve special travel memories.

제안: This reply is unclear and contains many hesitations and repetitions. Produce a direct topic sentence naming your preference, then give two clear reasons using linking words (for example, because / moreover). Use specific vocabulary (architecture, street art, storefronts) and avoid fillers like “uh” and repeated words.

예시: I prefer urban views because the architecture and street art are more varied. For instance, modern skyscrapers and historic buildings provide interesting shapes, and colorful murals and decorated shopfronts make the streets visually appealing.

제안: Your answer is vague and grammatically incorrect. Give a clear stance (either neutral or a slight preference) and support it with a reason and an example. Use linking words like “however” or “for example,” and avoid unclear phrases like “it will be nothing.”

예시: I don’t have a strong preference; I photograph beautiful scenery wherever I find it. For example, I enjoy capturing coastal cliffs at home, but I also love photographing mountain ranges when I travel abroad because each country offers different light and landscapes.

× I love taking pictures of different views like mountains and some fascinating views from the ocean or from the lake view.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views, such as mountains and fascinating views of the ocean or the lake.

The phrase 'from the lake view' is awkward and uses prepositions incorrectly. Use 'of' to indicate what the picture shows (views of the ocean/the lake). Also replace 'like' with 'such as' for examples and remove redundancy 'some fascinating views'. Improve word order for natural English. Suggestion: Use 'views of' rather than 'views from' when describing scenes captured.

× And also I have a hobby of keeping memories in the form of pictures in.

✓ I also have a hobby of preserving memories in the form of pictures.

The original sentence ends with an extra preposition 'in' and has awkward word order. Remove the trailing 'in' and use 'preserving memories' or 'keeping memories' with correct noun phrase order. Suggestion: Place adverbs like 'also' before the main verb and avoid dangling prepositions.

× Definitely, I want to, I want views from the urban areas because because of the unique constructions and uh, also it has many, uh, different, uh, uh, decorative decoration on roads and also in the malls with, uh, represent some uniqueness of the.

✓ Definitely, I prefer views of urban areas because of the unique buildings and decorative elements on the streets and in malls that show their uniqueness.

Multiple issues: repetition ('I want to, I want'), unnecessary filler words ('uh'), incorrect noun choice ('constructions' should be 'buildings'), awkward phrase 'decorative decoration', and an incomplete ending. Rephrase to a concise, grammatical sentence: use 'prefer' for preference, 'views of urban areas', and 'decorative elements' to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: Remove filler words and finish the sentence with a clear subject and verb.

× And is not something specific, but uh, wherever it has beautiful view, uh, from the ocean or the mountain.

✓ It's not something specific; I like any place that has a beautiful view, whether from the ocean or the mountains.

The original uses 'And is not' missing the subject 'it' and has incorrect agreement 'wherever it has beautiful view' (missing article and plural). Replace with 'It's not something specific' and 'a beautiful view' or 'beautiful views'. Suggestion: Always include the subject 'it' and use 'a' before 'beautiful view' or pluralize appropriately.

× And I usually prefer taking pictures. Uh, if it is another country, it will be nothing.

✓ I usually prefer taking pictures; if I am in another country, I would do the same.

The second clause 'if it is another country, it will be nothing' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use a conditional that matches the intended meaning: if in another country, the preference does not change. Use 'I would do the same' or 'I would still take pictures'. Suggestion: Express conditional ideas with clear subjects and verbs and appropriate modal (would) for hypothetical situations.