Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and avoid repetition; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct small grammatical slips (e.g., avoid fragments like “all of the.”).

예시: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph beaches and sunsets because they have vibrant colors and changing light, which makes each photo unique.

제안: Give a direct preference first, then explain with a clear reason and one specific example. Use correct tense and avoid filler phrases. Use linking words (however, because, for example) to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer rural views because they feel more peaceful and natural. For example, when I lived in the countryside I enjoyed wide fields and mountain vistas, which were much more relaxing than busy city streets.

제안: Start with a clear answer (own country or other countries) then give specific contrasts and reasons. Use linking words (however, whereas, because) and avoid listing without explanation. Mention one concrete example to support your point.

예시: I enjoy views in both my own country and other countries, but I prefer natural scenery I experienced in the Philippines because the beaches and tropical landscapes were more varied. For instance, the clear water and palm-lined shores there felt more picturesque than the urban skylines I see in South Korea.

× Yes, I do love taking pictures of different views such as the beach view, the seashore, the sunset, all of the. All of the nature.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different scenes, such as the beach, the seashore, the sunset, and other aspects of nature.

The original contains fragmented phrases and awkward repetition ('all of the. All of the nature.'). This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Correct by removing redundant auxiliary 'do' (optional for emphasis) and combining fragments with conjunctions and parallel structure: list items should share form (beach, seashore, sunset) and finish with a coherent phrase ('other aspects of nature'). Suggestion: Use parallel list items and avoid sentence fragments; keep punctuation consistent.

× That's quite hard to answer since I live in our urban area right now, but back in the days when I live in rural, the scenery is such is so breathtaking.

✓ That's quite hard to answer since I live in an urban area right now, but back in the day when I lived in the countryside, the scenery was so breathtaking.

Multiple errors here: wrong determiner 'our' (should be 'an' for general statement) and incorrect time expression 'back in the days' should be 'back in the day'; 'live' should be past tense 'lived' for past reference, and 'in rural' is incorrect preposition and noun choice — use 'in the countryside' or 'in a rural area'. The main types are incorrect use of prepositions/articles (ID 11 and 22) and tense (ID 5). Corrections: change 'our urban area' to 'an urban area', 'back in the day' for idiomatic usage, 'when I lived' for past tense, and 'in the countryside' for correct noun phrase. Suggestion: Match tense to time expressions and use standard prepositional phrases ('in the countryside' or 'in a rural area'). Use 'an' before a singular count noun that is indefinite.

× But back in the Philippines when I lived for several years there, the scenery is amazing.

✓ But back in the Philippines, when I lived there for several years, the scenery was amazing.

The original mixes past reference ('when I lived for several years there') with present-tense 'is amazing', causing tense inconsistency. This is a past tense issue (ID 5). Change 'is' to 'was' to keep the past narrative consistent and reposition 'for several years' for natural word order. Suggestion: Keep verb tense consistent when referring to past experiences; place duration phrases next to the verb they modify.