Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more accurate and concise. Correct the word choice error ("wheels" → "views" or "scenes") and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or an example using a linking word (e.g., "because", "so"). Keep the answer to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes, I love taking photos of different views because they help me preserve memories of places I've visited. For example, I often photograph city skylines and mountain valleys and later share the best shots with my friends and family.

제안: Make the response more natural and specific. Use a clear topic sentence and then one or two specific supporting details. Replace awkward phrases ("modern pattern") with precise vocabulary (e.g., "architectural styles", "city life") and avoid listing too many vague items. Use a linking word such as "because" to connect idea and detail.

예시: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the variety of architectural styles and the energy of city life. For instance, I like photographing modern glass buildings and busy streets full of cars and people in different outfits.

제안: Avoid repetition and improve grammar and clarity. Begin with a direct answer, then give a specific reason and one example. Replace repeated words ("love") with synonyms and fix word order problems ("sceneries of different cultures" → "scenery and cultural differences"). Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing different scenery and cultural landscapes. For example, I like photographing colorful markets abroad and coastal vistas that are unlike those at home.

× Yes, I love taking photos of different wheels because it's a wonderful way to preserve memories of places I've visited.

✓ Yes, I love taking photos of different views because it's a wonderful way to preserve memories of places I've visited.

The student used the word 'wheels' which is incorrect in this context; they likely meant 'views' or 'scenes'. This is a vocabulary/word choice error that fits under incorrect use of adjectives or nouns. Suggestion: use 'views', 'scenes', or 'landscapes' when talking about photographic subjects of places.

× I like urban sceneries more because I love to see the modern pattern of the buildings and the crowded cities with cars and people wearing different kinds of clothes.

✓ I prefer urban scenery because I like to see the modern patterns of buildings and the crowded streets with cars and people wearing different kinds of clothes.

'Sceneries' is uncountable in this sense; use 'scenery' or 'views'. 'Prefer' fits the question better than 'like ... more'. 'Modern pattern of the buildings' is awkward; use 'modern patterns of buildings'. 'Crowded cities' is clumsy when describing scenes; 'crowded streets' is clearer. Suggestion: use uncountable 'scenery' and plural 'patterns' and more natural collocations like 'crowded streets'.

× I love to travel to other countries because I love to see different sceneries of different cultures and landscapes to me.

✓ I love to travel to other countries because I enjoy seeing different landscapes and cultures.

The original is repetitive ('I love' twice, 'different sceneries of different cultures and landscapes to me' is ungrammatical and awkward). This is a sentence structure and redundancy issue. Suggestion: avoid repeating the same verb and restructure for clarity: 'enjoy seeing different landscapes and cultures.'