Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more concise and natural by giving a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid repetition (e.g., “different angles, different stories, different memories” repeated) and correct minor grammar issues (e.g., “in every angle” → “from every angle”).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because each angle can tell a different story. For example, a horizontal shot often captures wide landscapes, while a vertical shot highlights tall buildings or a person’s full posture, so I choose the angle depending on what I want to emphasize.

제안: Clarify your preference and give specific reasons with better vocabulary. Avoid contradictory or unclear statements (you said you can see nature in urban area and then compared to rural area unclear). Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘for example’ and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I prefer urban views because cities combine modern architecture with green spaces. For example, I enjoy photographing glass skyscrapers, street scenes, and city parks — the contrast between buildings and trees creates interesting compositions.

제안: Be more precise with vocabulary and reduce repetition of “vast categories.” Provide one specific reason and an illustrative example. Use linking words such as ‘because’, ‘for example’, or ‘for instance’ to structure your answer naturally.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because India offers great diversity. For instance, within a few hours’ travel you can see beaches, mountains, historic monuments and different cultural scenes, so I rarely get tired of photographing new places.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because in every angle of picture I think so that we have different angles, different stories, different memories.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because from every angle of a picture we get different perspectives, different stories, and different memories.

The original had awkward phrasing and misuse of 'in every angle of picture' and 'I think so that'. Use of gerund 'taking' is fine but the noun phrase needs articles and clearer prepositions. Change 'in' to 'from' and add 'a' before 'picture'; replace 'I think so that we have' with 'we get' for clarity and naturalness.

× Like if we see a horizontal picture, it has a different memory and stories, and if we see in a vertical view then the stories and memories are different.

✓ For example, a horizontal picture evokes different memories and stories than a vertical one.

The original sentence is wordy and has mixed singular/plural agreement ('a different memory and stories'). Simplify structure: use 'evokes' and compare 'horizontal' and 'vertical' forms directly. Make nouns consistent ('memories and stories').

× Generally I prefer urban area because in urban area we can see the nature, we can see the environment but unless of rural area we can only see landscapers, big buildings, glass buildings and different modern designs, architectures.

✓ Generally I prefer urban areas because in cities we can see nature and the built environment; unlike rural areas, we also see skyscrapers, glass buildings, and various modern architectural designs.

Problems: singular/plural ('urban area' should be 'urban areas' or 'the urban area'), incorrect use of 'unless of', and awkward words like 'landscapers' (wrong word) and 'architectures'. Quantifier and noun forms corrected ('various', 'architectural designs'). Also clarified contrast with 'unlike rural areas'.

× I would like to click more and more pictures of urban areas.

✓ I would like to take more and more pictures of urban areas.

In English, 'take pictures' is the natural collocation; 'click pictures' is influenced by other varieties. Verb + -ing 'taking' is acceptable, but here use 'take' to match the modal 'would like to' and natural collocation.

× I prefer views in my own country because India has a vast category of nature's, vast categories of modern architecture and vast categories of people.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because India has a vast variety of natural landscapes, modern architecture, and people.

Errors: incorrect possessive 'nature's', and awkward 'vast categories' repeated. Use 'a vast variety of' and correct nouns ('natural landscapes', 'modern architecture'). Articles adjusted accordingly.

× Also, whenever you roam anywhere in different states of India, you will get to see a different kind of animal, people, landscapes etcetera.

✓ Also, whenever you travel to different states of India, you will see different kinds of animals, people, and landscapes.

Use 'travel to' instead of 'roam anywhere in', and pluralize 'animals' and 'kinds' for agreement. Removed 'get to' (optional) and 'etcetera' is unnecessary. Improved parallel structure and preposition use.