Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., "photos" not "a photos"), and use one or two supporting details. Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly and provide a specific example of a memory or place.

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially in cities, because they help me remember places after I leave. For example, I often photograph historic streets and café fronts and later look through the photos in an album to recall the trip.

제안: Make the response grammatically correct and more coherent. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating preference, then give one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid repetition and vague phrases; mention a concrete rural feature (e.g., fields, quiet trails).

예시: I prefer rural views because the quiet atmosphere and open green fields help me relax. For example, walking along a country trail and photographing wildflowers makes me feel calm and disconnected from city noise.

제안: Remove hesitations ("MMM") and correct vocabulary (use "views" not "viewers"). Start with a direct statement, then explain why with a specific example of something new you discovered abroad. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they often surprise me with new sights and cultural differences. For instance, when I visited Japan I photographed a traditional market and discovered interesting foods and architecture I had never seen before.

× Yes, I like taking a photos, especially in the city because taking photos can bring the memorized when I leave the city and I can take them in the album and remember them.

✓ Yes, I like taking photos, especially in the city, because taking photos can bring back memories when I leave the city and I can put them in an album and remember them.

The phrase 'a photos' uses the indefinite article with a plural noun; use 'photos' without 'a' (Article errors, ID 22). 'Bring the memorized' is ungrammatical; the correct phrase is 'bring back memories' (incorrect word choice but treated here as sentence structure; Recommend using 'bring back memories'). 'Take them in the album' is incorrect; use 'put them in an album' to describe placing photos into an album. Also added commas for clarity.

× I prefer the rural areas because if you are in the rural, the atmosphere and environment will make me feel relaxed and peaceful.

✓ I prefer rural areas because when you are in the countryside, the atmosphere and environment make me feel relaxed and peaceful.

'The rural' is an incorrect noun phrase and 'rural areas' or 'the countryside' should be used (Incorrect use of pronouns/word choice; ID 12). 'Will make me feel' conflicts with general preference statements; present tense 'make me feel' is appropriate for habitual or general truths (Present tense issue, ID 6). Also removed 'the' before 'rural areas' for natural phrasing.

× So these rural areas will make a show me how the environment peaceful and so greens since.

✓ So these rural areas show how peaceful the environment is and how green it is.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and contains redundant and incorrect words ('make a show me', 'so greens since'). The corrected version uses clear clause structure: 'show how peaceful the environment is and how green it is.' This fixes sentence structure errors (ID 26) and subject-verb agreement and adjective use.

× I prefer viewers in other countries because MMM other countries may always bring the surprise into me because when I MMM arrived at other countries and I take a views, I also found some new things that I never made.

✓ I prefer views from other countries because other countries always surprise me; when I arrive in other countries and take photos, I find new things that I have never seen before.

Multiple issues: 'viewers' is the wrong word; use 'views' or 'scenery' (Incorrect use of pronouns/word choice; ID 12). 'Bring the surprise into me' is unnatural; use 'surprise me.' Tense errors: 'MMM arrived' and 'I take a views' inconsistent—use present simple for habitual actions ('arrive'/'take photos') or present simple narration. 'I also found some new things that I never made' should be 'I find new things that I have never seen before'—use present perfect for experiences up to now (Past/present tense issues; IDs 5 and 6). Removed filler 'MMM' and corrected 'a views' to 'photos' or 'views'.