Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Reduce hesitations and filler words, correct small grammar errors, and make the answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons or an example using linking words. Aim for 2–4 sentences and replace fillers (umm, uh) with brief pauses if needed.

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views; it’s one of my hobbies. I like saving scenes on my phone so I can rewatch them later, especially landscapes that remind me of special trips.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Fix small grammatical issues (e.g., "it has" or "they have") and avoid repetition. Keep it to 2–3 sentences with clear vocabulary like "countryside," "landscapes," or "wildlife."

예시: I prefer photographing rural areas because the countryside has more natural scenery and wildlife. For example, I enjoy capturing rolling hills and rivers, which feel more peaceful than busy city scenes.

제안: Start with a clear preference statement and follow with specific reasons; then briefly acknowledge the alternative. Reduce fillers and fix grammar (e.g., "other countries," "see other landscapes"). Use linking words such as "however" or "but" to contrast. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: I usually prefer views in my own country because we have many mountains, rivers, and diverse landscapes that I love photographing. However, I would also like to see landscapes in other countries to experience different scenery and cultures.

× Yeah, really, I umm, I like taking pictures of different views.

✓ Yeah, I really like taking pictures of different views.

The original sentence has misplaced adverb 'really' and filler 'umm' that interrupt the verb phrase. Move 'really' before 'like' to correctly modify the verb 'like' and remove unnecessary fillers for clarity. Suggestion: place adverbs next to the verbs they modify and avoid fillers in formal responses.

× It's kinda my hobby and uh, uh, you can easily to uh, save it in memory umm, before rewatching it uh, in the future.

✓ It's kind of my hobby and you can easily save them in memory to look back on in the future.

Errors: 'kinda' is informal; 'you can easily to save' incorrectly uses 'to' after modal 'can' (modal + base verb required); 'it' refers to plural 'pictures' so use 'them'; 'rewatching' is awkward for photos - 'look back on' is more natural. Suggestions: use modal verbs with base form (can + verb), match pronoun number to antecedent, and choose appropriate verbs for context.

× Both of them are vivid but I prefer more taking photos of rural areas because it's it has more nature and I like enjoying nature views.

✓ Both are vivid, but I prefer taking photos of rural areas because they have more natural scenery and I enjoy nature views.

Problems: 'Both of them' is acceptable but wordy; 'prefer more taking photos' is ungrammatical — use 'prefer taking photos' or 'prefer to take photos'; 'it's it has' is redundant and mixes singular 'it' with plural 'rural areas' — use 'they have'; 'more nature' is unnatural; use 'more natural scenery' or 'more nature'. Suggestions: simplify phrases, ensure subject-pronoun agreement, and use correct verb forms for preferences (prefer + verb-ing or prefer to + verb).

× I prefer more uh, views in my own country because, uh, we have a lot of mountains, beautiful rivers and landscapes.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because we have a lot of mountains, beautiful rivers, and scenic landscapes.

Issues: 'prefer more views' is redundant — say 'I prefer views in my own country'; extra fillers 'uh' disrupt fluency; 'landscapes' is fine but 'scenic landscapes' is more natural collocation. Suggestions: remove fillers, avoid redundant modifiers, and use natural collocations.

× Umm, but of course, uh, I wanna try something new and watch uh, another landscapes in another countries. It will be a great experience.

✓ But of course I want to try something new and see other landscapes in other countries. It would be a great experience.

Problems: 'wanna' is informal; 'watch another landscapes' is incorrect — 'watch' is not used with landscapes, use 'see' or 'view'; 'another landscapes' mixes singular 'another' with plural 'landscapes' — use 'other landscapes'; 'in another countries' has article-number mismatch — use 'in other countries'; tense/modal: 'It will be a great experience' is acceptable, but 'would be' is more tentative and polite. Suggestions: use standard forms (want to), match singular/plural with determiners, choose correct verbs for objects, and use appropriate modality for hypothetical experiences.