Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a direct, clear response (yes or no) in one sentence, then add one or two brief supporting sentences that explain why using correct grammar and specific details. Use linking words like "because" or "so" and avoid unclear phrases (e.g., "dragging a photo").

예시: No, I don't usually take pictures of views because I prefer photographing people. For example, I enjoy capturing friends' expressions during events, as those moments feel more meaningful to me.

제안: Start with a clear preference (urban or rural) and give a specific reason. Use correct verb forms and linking words such as "because" or "so". Provide one concrete detail or example to make your answer more convincing.

예시: I usually prefer rural views because I like the peaceful atmosphere and wide open spaces. For instance, I enjoy walking by lakes or fields where I can relax and take my time to notice small details in nature.

제안: Answer directly (I prefer views in my country/other countries) and explain why with a clear reason and a concrete example. Use natural phrases like "I prefer views in my own country because..." and avoid unclear comparative phrasing.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I'm more familiar with the culture and landscapes, so I feel more comfortable exploring them. For example, I enjoy visiting local historical sites that remind me of my childhood and family stories.

× No personally I like dragging a photo what someone more than take a picture different view record. I like sorry because I enjoy.

✓ No. Personally, I prefer taking photos that someone else has taken rather than taking pictures of different views myself. I say that because I enjoy it.

Multiple errors: sentence structure (26), verb form and usage (8 and 26), incorrect relative clause and pronoun use (12), and missing punctuation/articles (22/17). The original is unclear and uses incorrect verbs: 'dragging a photo' is wrong; use 'taking photos' or 'looking at photos'. 'What someone more than take a picture different view record' is ungrammatical; use a relative clause 'that someone else has taken' and contrast with 'rather than taking pictures of different views myself'. Also include punctuation and a clear subject for 'I like sorry' -> 'I say that because I enjoy it'. Suggestion: simplify ideas, use correct verb forms ('prefer taking', 'has taken') and clear conjunctions ('rather than').

× I usually prefer will the board because I want to keep my moment about the earlier.

✓ I usually prefer the countryside because I want to keep my memories of earlier times.

Errors include incorrect modal/future usage (7) with 'will' where none is needed, wrong noun choice and word order (26), and unclear expression 'keep my moment about the earlier' which should be 'keep my memories of earlier times' (13/14). 'Prefer' should be followed by a noun or gerund without 'will'. Use proper collocations: 'the countryside' or 'rural areas' and 'keep my memories' rather than 'keep my moment'.

× For my perspective, I think that I prefer will in my country because I similar more than which is in my country.

✓ From my perspective, I prefer places in my own country because I am more familiar with them than with places in other countries.

Problems: incorrect modal use ('will') (7), awkward phrase 'for my perspective' -> 'from my perspective' (26), incorrect adjective use 'similar' instead of 'familiar' (13), incorrect comparative construction 'more than which is in my country' (25/26), and unclear pronoun reference. Correct form: 'prefer places in my own country' and comparative 'more familiar with them than with places in other countries'.