Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ слишком сумбурный и содержит повторы и лишние слова (например, "I like it" и "I use it every day" близки по смыслу). Не хватает чёткой структуры: начального topic sentence и затем связных деталей. Улучшите связность: используйте вводную тему, затем 1–2 поддерживающие детали с логическими связками и конкретикой (как часто, какие виды, пример, почему это важно). Также исправьте грамматику (например, убрать лишние слова "uh", согласовать времена и предлоги).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I have a professional camera and I use it every day, primarily to capture cityscapes and landscapes. For example, last weekend I photographed the riverside at sunset, and my friends liked the pictures when I shared them. I find photography relaxing and a great way to preserve memories.

제안: Ответ звучит резковато и содержит грамматические ошибки и повторения ("I just don't. Don't see"). Нет связующих слов и конкретных объяснений, почему предпочитаете урбанистические виды. Улучшите структуру: начальная фраза с предпочтением, затем конкретные причины (например, архитектура, свет, динамика) и одно краткое сравнение с сельскими пейзажами, используя связки (because, so, while). Избегайте категоричных заявлений типа "I don't like it at all" без объяснения.

예시: I prefer views in urban areas because I grew up in a city and I appreciate architectural details and vibrant street scenes. For instance, I enjoy photographing old buildings and busy markets since they offer interesting textures and lighting. While rural areas can be peaceful, I find them less visually stimulating for my style of photography.

제안: Ответ неясен и содержит ошибки ("prefer use", "how is it is"). Отвечайте прямо: предпочитаете ли вы местные или зарубежные виды, затем объясните причину и приведите конкретный пример. Используйте связующие слова (however, also, because) и уточните, что именно вам нравится в каждой категории, и как вы делитесь фотографиями. Уберите повторяющиеся фразы и исправьте грамматику.

예시: I enjoy photographing views both in my own country and abroad. At home I know the best spots and can capture familiar scenes in different seasons, while abroad I like discovering new landscapes and cultural details. For example, when I visited Spain last year I photographed colorful street murals and then shared the best shots on Instagram.

× Yes I do uh, I have a professional camera and I use it every day so it's like my hobby. I like it and since my photos of different views and pictures for my friends, they enjoy it.

✓ Yes, I do. I have a professional camera and I use it every day, so photography is my hobby. I like it, and I take photos of different views and pictures for my friends; they enjoy them.

The sentence has issues with word choice and noun reference rather than present participle specifically. Use 'photography is my hobby' instead of 'it's like my hobby' for clarity. Use 'I take photos' rather than 'since my photos' to make the action clear. Replace pronoun 'it' with 'them' to agree in number with 'photos'. Suggestion: state the action with a verb (take) and ensure pronouns match the noun in number.

× Actually, I'm really prefer more view in urban areas because I live all my life in urban areas and I just don't. Don't see aesthetic in rural areas. I don't like it at all.

✓ Actually, I really prefer urban views because I have lived all my life in urban areas, and I just don't see the aesthetics in rural areas. I don't like them at all.

Use 'prefer' without 'am' (avoid 'I'm really prefer'). Use present perfect 'have lived' to express living throughout life up to now. 'View' should be plural 'views' or 'urban views'. 'Don't see aesthetic' is incorrect; use 'don't see the aesthetics' or 'don't find them aesthetic'. Pronoun agreement: replace 'it' with 'them' to refer to plural 'rural areas' or 'views'. Suggestion: remove auxiliary 'am' before 'prefer', use correct plural nouns and appropriate tense.

× Honestly I prefer use in my own country and other country too because I think every country is beautiful how is it is and I enjoy other countries too and do pictures and post it in Instagram every day.

✓ Honestly, I prefer to take photos in my own country and in other countries too because I think every country is beautiful as it is. I enjoy visiting other countries, taking pictures, and posting them on Instagram every day.

Use verb pattern 'prefer to do something' (prefer to take photos) rather than 'prefer use'. Make nouns plural when appropriate: 'other countries'. 'How is it is' is ungrammatical; use 'as it is'. Use parallel structure for activities: 'visiting, taking, and posting'. Pronoun agreement: 'them' for 'pictures'. Suggestion: use correct infinitive after 'prefer', plural forms, and parallel verb forms.