Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more grammatical, concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Reduce hesitations and avoid unnecessary repetition. Focus on concrete details (e.g. what you photograph, how it makes you feel, who you share with).

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I especially like photographing beautiful landscapes such as sunsets or coastal scenes because photography relaxes me and helps preserve memories of the atmosphere and fresh air. For example, I often take pictures at the beach and share them with my friends to show what the place felt like.

제안: Answer directly, avoid repetition and filler words, and supply clearer supporting details and a short explanation. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example' and give 1–2 specific examples to support your preference.

예시: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because I love natural scenery. For example, I enjoy photographing mountains, rivers and open fields since they feel peaceful and offer varied textures and colors that are pleasing in photos.

제안: Be concise and avoid vague phrases like 'most of the umm.' State your preference clearly, then give a specific reason and an example of what kind of new views you want to see. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultural scenes I can't find at home. For example, I would like to photograph European historic towns and tropical beaches in Asia to capture architectural details and vibrant colors that are unique to those places.

× Yes I do, I like to taking picture of beautiful places or beautiful scenery when I see and uh photography is relaxing and it make me more memory about the places and the fresh air and I want to share this with my friends.

✓ Yes, I do. I like taking pictures of beautiful places or scenery when I see them, and photography is relaxing and it helps me remember the places and the fresh air, and I want to share them with my friends.

The phrase 'to taking' mixes the infinitive 'to' with the gerund 'taking'; use either 'to take' or the gerund 'taking' after 'like' — 'like taking' is natural. 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match general activity. 'When I see' needs an object 'them' to refer to the places. 'It make me more memory' is ungrammatical: use 'helps me remember' or 'makes me have more memories'. Also add commas and split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use 'I like taking pictures' and 'it helps me remember'.

× Personally, I prefer umm, I prefer to use a rural areas, uh, because I love the the beautiful scenery like I, I love natural scenery like mountains, river and fields umm, and the nature look me that may.

✓ Personally, I prefer rural areas because I love beautiful natural scenery, like mountains, rivers, and fields, and I enjoy being close to nature.

'A rural areas' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'areas'; remove the article or use singular 'a rural area'. 'River' should be plural 'rivers' to match the list. The clause 'the nature look me that may' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with a clear phrase such as 'I enjoy being close to nature'. Suggestion: use consistent pluralization for lists and avoid unnecessary articles.

× To be honest, I prefer to see other countries because in other countries I can see the most of the umm new places and I will have the new views and new scenery and also see the beautiful place not in my country.

✓ To be honest, I prefer to visit other countries because I can see many new places there; I will have new views and scenery and see beautiful places that are not in my country.

'Prefer to see other countries' is awkward; use 'prefer to visit other countries' or 'prefer seeing other countries'. 'The most of the new places' is incorrect; use 'many new places' or 'most of the new places' (without 'the' depending on context). 'See the beautiful place not in my country' needs plural and relative clause: 'see beautiful places that are not in my country'. Also keep future/modal consistency: 'I will have' is acceptable, but present 'I can see' works for ability. Suggestion: use 'visit' for traveling and correct quantifier and relative clause structures.