Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and sentence structure: use correct verb forms and articles, and break the long sentence into a clear topic sentence plus one supporting detail. Be more specific about why it takes time (e.g., setting up, waiting for light). Use linking words like 'but' or 'because' appropriately and avoid repetition.

예시: I used to enjoy photographing different views, such as mountains, seascapes and school buildings. However, I don't do it much now because taking good photos often requires a lot of time — for example, I need to set up the camera and wait for good lighting. Because of that, I don't go out to take pictures as often.

제안: Provide a concise topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (use 'have lived', 'escape from urban life', singular/plural forms) and avoid repeating phrases. Mention concrete examples or feelings to enrich the answer.

예시: I prefer rural views because I have lived in an urban area for 25 years and enjoy escaping city life. For instance, I like photographing mountain ranges and ocean horizons in quiet villages, where the scenery and fresh air help me relax.

제안: Start with a clear direct answer, then give specific contrasts and avoid redundant phrases. Fix grammar (e.g., 'there are many apartment blocks' and avoid repeating 'see'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' correctly, and describe why old houses/rivers are appealing (history, atmosphere).

예시: I prefer views in other countries because my city is dominated by apartment blocks and lacks historical scenery. For example, when I visit Europe I enjoy seeing old houses and rivers lined with historic buildings — the architecture and atmosphere make me feel happy and inspired.

× I used to love to taking pictures of different views such as mountains, sceneries, schools and seas but currently I don't really like it because it takes so much time when I try to take a photos so I don't really want to.

✓ I used to love taking pictures of different views such as mountains, scenery, schools and the sea, but currently I don't really like it because it takes so much time when I try to take photos, so I don't really want to.

The phrase 'love to taking' mixes an infinitive and a gerund; after 'used to love' the verb should be the gerund 'taking' (Grammar Problem Type 8). Also 'a photos' is incorrect: 'photos' is plural and should not have 'a' (Grammar Problem Type 1). 'Sceneries' is uncountable here; use 'scenery' (Grammar Problem Type 22/1). 'Seas' is unusual; use 'the sea' for general reference (Grammar Problem Type 22). Suggestions: use 'love taking', remove the article before plural nouns, and use uncountable/singular forms for mass nouns like 'scenery' and 'the sea'.

× I love rural areas because I lived in urban areas for 25 years so I just want to escape from this urban areas and I want to go rural areas and take a photos of a scenery like mountains and ocean views.

✓ I love rural areas because I lived in urban areas for 25 years, so I just want to escape from these urban areas and go to rural areas and take photos of scenery such as mountains and ocean views.

Use of articles and prepositions is incorrect: 'escape from this urban areas' mixes singular demonstrative 'this' with plural 'areas' and should be 'these urban areas' (Grammar Problem Type 11 and 12). 'Go rural areas' needs the preposition 'to' ('go to rural areas') (Grammar Problem Type 11). 'A photos' is wrong article+plural (Grammar Problem Type 1/22). 'A scenery' is wrong; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun, so use 'scenery' without an article (Grammar Problem Type 22). Suggestions: match demonstratives to number, use 'go to' with places, remove articles with uncountable nouns, and use 'photos' without 'a'.

× I don't like my country's views because there are so many apartments in my city and for example, when I go to Europe, I see I can see a lot of old houses and old rivers and that makes me so happy when I watch that.

✓ I don't like the views in my country because there are so many apartment buildings in my city; for example, when I go to Europe, I can see a lot of old houses and rivers, and that makes me very happy to see.

Pronoun and noun choice errors: 'my country's views' is acceptable but 'the views in my country' is more natural (Grammar Problem Type 12/26). 'Apartments' is better specified as 'apartment buildings' or 'apartments' without plural confusion; here 'apartment buildings' clarifies the meaning (Grammar Problem Type 13). The phrase 'I see I can see' is redundant; use one modal 'I can see' (Grammar Problem Type 26). 'Old rivers' is odd—'rivers' suffice (Grammar Problem Type 13). 'That makes me so happy when I watch that' uses 'watch' awkwardly; 'to see' or 'when I see them' is correct (Grammar Problem Type 26). Suggestions: simplify redundant phrases, choose clearer nouns, and use natural verbs like 'see' with scenes rather than 'watch'.